A Mathematical Rhapsody

A Mathematical Rhapsody

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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This poem shows the sentiments of a mathematician towards his lover in mathematical form.

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I doubt; Can I live long rather?
As we both are parallel lines, which do not meet each other.

To understand you is a task very hard;
Before that, the problems of Mensuration I will regard.

Expressions of your face frequently deviates,
That the comprehension of sine and cosine alleviates.

Our only meeting of love made me disappoint.
It was like a tangent that meets a circle only at one point.

I promised you there that all your expenses I will afford.
As I am the diameter of my family circle, which is the longest chord.

My love towards you will truly suit.
It is a quadratic equation of real root.

In your friend circle, I was too your friend.
But I was like an Arithmetic Progression's term of the end.

Your deception make me full of sorrow,
My life becomes as a cylinder hollow.

In your love, I myself dangle.
I act as an unknown value of an angle.

In your life, I am one of the obstruction.
It seems to me that I am an endless construction. 

© 2017 Raj Sahu


Author's Note

Raj Sahu
It is a little weird and humorous.

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“In your love, I myself dangle.
I act as an unknown value of an angle.

In your life, I am one of the obstruction.
It seems to me that I am an endless construction."

I should really applaud this work of you for both of its parameters- unique and humorous. I am really startled how one can knit a poem, a poem of love, through the central theme- Mathematics. It is really an amazing work. Somewhere I find rhymes a little odd, but it's effect outshone by this amazing love comedy. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

6 Years Ago

Thanks from the core of my heart!



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I think it is wonderful! But me no understand big words (Joke!). Lol haha :3

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you. 😊
This was a very nice writing exercise and it is always good to see a poet testing their talents looking for new forms and formats to expand their skills. Many years ago when I taught poetry I suggest that every time you wrote a poem you make use of a now word that you had never used before. That not only increases your vocabulary but opens new poetry possibilities with every new word, something to consider. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot dear Bear. 😊
Bear

7 Years Ago

This is the kind of writing that can help you make a career in the writing field so keep pushing you.. read more
Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Yes, thanks once again. 😊
I must say... I love rhyme and that's why I enjoyed this but... I didn't understand a single thing. And I can't pretend and write a nice review on something that got me so confused. But I get that you had fun writing this so great work. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much. 😊
Wow...
Really creative writing and it's well written. I admire the concept. Undoubtedly one of your best.

"In your love, I myself dangle.
I act as an unknown value of an angle." Should be my best part of it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much. 😊
Okay, the blunt critique first: the rhymes of verses 1 and 3 are clunky while the others are quite clever. Secondly, I feel that this should be slightly longer or shorter, as something about the length seems slightly awkward. Lastly, I noticed that most of the terms are geometric; perhaps varying the mathematical areas would make it more interesting.

And now the praise! I love the idea of expressing feelings about another person using terms from a discipline that is very concrete. It feels original and quite refreshing, and I love your metaphors; 'tangent meeting a circle at one point' and 'unknown value of angle' are my favorites. The meter has a lovely feel to it as well. Like most things, this just needs some editing and polish. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot. 😊
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CMC
This was very interesting. I like how you tied in mathematical terms so well with your rhymes, and I think that ending set of lines was very powerful. "In your life, I am one of obstruction. It seems to me that I'm endless construction." Excellent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear. 😊
CMC

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)
I really, really enjoyed this. Good job! Don't hesitate to write more like this!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot. 😊
This really made me miss my Alevel Maths class loool one of the most fun classes ever !!
Anyway i loved this !!! It was nicely written

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you. 😊
here you have related every another aspect of your life with mathematics and that's truly incredible... awesome job done :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much dear. 😊
You are very talented at this, you have a unique way of writing. Thanks for sharing buddy. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much. 😊
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

your welcome

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Added on June 5, 2017
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Tags: Maths, Love, Sorrow, Humour, Lines

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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Myself Raj Sahu from the historic town of Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India. I had completed my high schooling with flying colours from Choithram School, Indore in Humanities stream and was first in or.. more..

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