Dark Side of a Circus

This poem give message that animals and birds should not be harassed.

Along with my family, I am visiting a Circus;

Very delighted and excited I am.

But suddenly; a painful sight jerk us

And everybody's cheek it slam.

We see many animals and birds

Who are looking with their elegiac eyes.

Beasts are mostly in girds,

Standing in despair and cries.

Hear what the bird say,

"Flying is my natural behaviour

but they clips my wings all day,

I feel a need of saviour."

And then the horse quoth,

"They tethers me with short rope

which I strongly loath

and only thing I want is to elope."

The dog is not far behind in saying,

"They locks me up in cage.

All mankind is betraying

and this act makes me enrage."

Then the elephant tell,

"I am waiting for an apostle,

To save me; as they compel

and beat me to keep me docile."

On hearing all; I feel an intense disgust,

Disgust for our selfishness.

It is our duty to entrust,

But we are surrounded by our greediness.

I am feeling myself guilty,

How offensive we became!

How one can show such cruelty?

I am feeling all ashame.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems

Reviews

[Eggplant]

This was a heartfelt poem. It really got a message across, on how animal circuses are horrible. I really was persuaded by this poem, and it gives me a new look on animal circuses. Your grammar is pretty good, except in a few spots :p The biggest thing that I would suggest that you change about this poem is the colors. The different colors when I first took a look at your poem confused me because there was so much going on. but then I realized it was the different voices of the animals. In the future, I would try to avoid this, for it kind of hurt my eyes to look at. If you want color, try to stay with one, and if you want to stress certain lines, make them bold, or italic. I'm sorry if that sounded a little bit harsh because I didn't want it to sound that way I feel that this poem brings so much emotion to the readers. It was like I was looking through the eyes of the animals stuck there in the circus. And the expanded vocabulary words, like quoth, and docile, and elegiac, really made your story so much better. Last little note, kudos on making your poem rhyme, because that is very hard to do when you are trying to convey a certain message, I really enjoyed your poem, and keep up the great work!
-Lily

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks from the bottom of my heart! You gave such a precious time of yours to review my work, I am so grateful to you. I will take care of colours next time.

[Joey Nizz]

Animal cruelty is like human trafficking or slavery, we are all living on this earth to be free, whether we are human or not, we are created for a purpose, all of us from a human to a worm.
The circus runners think that they are amusing others by forcing animals but the animals arnt abused at all, we cant see it but they are crying loudly from the inside.
Thanks for sharing.

[Raj Sahu]

True. Thanks for your review. 😊

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome.

[CMC]

Animal cruelty is something we should deeply ashamed of. This gave some strong insight to this topic through the circus, a place we thought was full of dreams, but is just full of despair. Thank you for sharing.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Few circus are left here in the USA. Abuse of animals closed most down. Than you for sharing your words and thoughts on a important topic.
Coyote

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[pia]

Animal cruelty is sadly a huge problem
Especially here in the subcontinent and its really good you wrote about
Brings out awareness

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear. 😊

[Stacy Purvis]

*tears* This is so true. Please share this poem on every social media. You are an advocate for these beautiful sentient beings.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much dear. 😊

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

This poem is so great! Animal cruelty should never be tolerated.We just didn't realize the conditions these animals were kept in. Your poem tells it from the animals" point of view-so original and powerful. Beautiful rhyme and flow. Thank you for this

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot. 😊

[Isimbabi]

I like the concept. It's a very creative piece.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks. 😊

[Cy!]

I with you on this one. I love animals. Nicely penned. I like how you do experiences from different animals. It gives them a sort of personality.

Also reminds me of pokemon... those poor creatures ha... just kidding. Nicely done though,

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your review. 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

I really liked this. The way you quoted the feelings of animals was excellent.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.