Dark Side of a Circus

This poem give message that animals and birds should not be harassed.

Along with my family, I am visiting a Circus;

Very delighted and excited I am.

But suddenly; a painful sight jerk us

And everybody's cheek it slam.

We see many animals and birds

Who are looking with their elegiac eyes.

Beasts are mostly in girds,

Standing in despair and cries.

Hear what the bird say,

"Flying is my natural behaviour

but they clips my wings all day,

I feel a need of saviour."

And then the horse quoth,

"They tethers me with short rope

which I strongly loath

and only thing I want is to elope."

The dog is not far behind in saying,

"They locks me up in cage.

All mankind is betraying

and this act makes me enrage."

Then the elephant tell,

"I am waiting for an apostle,

To save me; as they compel

and beat me to keep me docile."

On hearing all; I feel an intense disgust,

Disgust for our selfishness.

It is our duty to entrust,

But we are surrounded by our greediness.

I am feeling myself guilty,

How offensive we became!

How one can show such cruelty?

I am feeling all ashame.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems

Reviews

[Eggplant]

This was a heartfelt poem. It really got a message across, on how animal circuses are horrible. I really was persuaded by this poem, and it gives me a new look on animal circuses. Your grammar is pretty good, except in a few spots :p The biggest thing that I would suggest that you change about this poem is the colors. The different colors when I first took a look at your poem confused me because there was so much going on. but then I realized it was the different voices of the animals. In the future, I would try to avoid this, for it kind of hurt my eyes to look at. If you want color, try to stay with one, and if you want to stress certain lines, make them bold, or italic. I'm sorry if that sounded a little bit harsh because I didn't want it to sound that way I feel that this poem brings so much emotion to the readers. It was like I was looking through the eyes of the animals stuck there in the circus. And the expanded vocabulary words, like quoth, and docile, and elegiac, really made your story so much better. Last little note, kudos on making your poem rhyme, because that is very hard to do when you are trying to convey a certain message, I really enjoyed your poem, and keep up the great work!
-Lily

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks from the bottom of my heart! You gave such a precious time of yours to review my work, I am so grateful to you. I will take care of colours next time.

[Jackie]

A lovely expression and way of describing the mess all around us.. Keep up the writing. I don't often read. But when i do i try to read as much as i can

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. 😊

[Rimpi Saikia]

This is beautiful. Subtle emotions portrayed at it's best!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you. 😊

[ashish hajagulkar]

Nice thought about care of animals in circus

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks. 😊

[Ellie Qtz]

I am absolutely amazed, the feel is just heartbreaking! I definitely agree with the moral of the story

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot. 😊

[Topkat]

Very well written and endorses a positive message from such a horrible industry

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you. 😊

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

The expoItalian of a weaker creature for monitory gains is tragic. As I read I ask myself how one can be blinded by greed and closed of heart. You make a sad but honest theme here from the Impath of emotions you contain. Most the audience overlooks what their tickets has bought them. I found myself looking through your eyes as well as applying this to other weak and innocents creature's greed enslaves. Excellent Poetry.
Thank you for sharing and God Bless

Sheer Terror

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot dear. 😊

[Mr.Writer]

Wow, such a great poem! :)
It talks about animal cruelty very well and emotions flow really well in this poem, like of sadness, anger and helplessness of the animals....
Keep it up

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much. 😊

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Muse]

I appreciate your passion. But don't post it until you clean through the grammar. It's what separates Mozart from the next starving artist. It's what separate's a seasoned writer from my daughter's 4th grade paper.

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks for your review. 😊

[Muse]

You are welcome.

[WoodenChair]

Circus animals are like celebrities of the animal kingdom, do you think their free counterparts care that their own species is caged and used for our entertainment? absolutely not, they see this animal living a live of privilege whilst others are out there hunting to survive, risking their life to protect their family every single day.. who cares if you poke it a few times with a hot stick to perform? That animal has a life like no other..

Hate this poem so much, 1 point

[Raj Sahu]

Though they are privileged there but there are not free. They want their own natural habitat to live and it is their destiny to live in forest. And for the hunters and poachers, they are strictly banned here and wish that they will be in your dear resident country.

[WoodenChair]

If this is your logic then why don't you write Poetry about Kim Kardashian? would you not agree that she too is privileged but not free?

[Raj Sahu]

It's my pen and my wish. You should be courteous while reviewing one's post.

[Muse]

Watch the documentary "Black Fish" it will change your perspective on a lot of things. My kids no longer desire to see Sea World.

[Raj Sahu]

An individual's perspective is decided by what glass he wears over his eyes. As all the fingers of a palm are not same in size, so as the nature of perspective.

[Poetic License]

Massive amount of truth here, my friend. It is a sadness when we have to lock things away in order to enjoy their beauty.

[Raj Sahu]

Very true. Thanks.😊