Dark Side of a Circus

This poem give message that animals and birds should not be harassed.

Along with my family, I am visiting a Circus;

Very delighted and excited I am.

But suddenly; a painful sight jerk us

And everybody's cheek it slam.

We see many animals and birds

Who are looking with their elegiac eyes.

Beasts are mostly in girds,

Standing in despair and cries.

Hear what the bird say,

"Flying is my natural behaviour

but they clips my wings all day,

I feel a need of saviour."

And then the horse quoth,

"They tethers me with short rope

which I strongly loath

and only thing I want is to elope."

The dog is not far behind in saying,

"They locks me up in cage.

All mankind is betraying

and this act makes me enrage."

Then the elephant tell,

"I am waiting for an apostle,

To save me; as they compel

and beat me to keep me docile."

On hearing all; I feel an intense disgust,

Disgust for our selfishness.

It is our duty to entrust,

But we are surrounded by our greediness.

I am feeling myself guilty,

How offensive we became!

How one can show such cruelty?

I am feeling all ashame.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems

Reviews

[Eggplant]

This was a heartfelt poem. It really got a message across, on how animal circuses are horrible. I really was persuaded by this poem, and it gives me a new look on animal circuses. Your grammar is pretty good, except in a few spots :p The biggest thing that I would suggest that you change about this poem is the colors. The different colors when I first took a look at your poem confused me because there was so much going on. but then I realized it was the different voices of the animals. In the future, I would try to avoid this, for it kind of hurt my eyes to look at. If you want color, try to stay with one, and if you want to stress certain lines, make them bold, or italic. I'm sorry if that sounded a little bit harsh because I didn't want it to sound that way I feel that this poem brings so much emotion to the readers. It was like I was looking through the eyes of the animals stuck there in the circus. And the expanded vocabulary words, like quoth, and docile, and elegiac, really made your story so much better. Last little note, kudos on making your poem rhyme, because that is very hard to do when you are trying to convey a certain message, I really enjoyed your poem, and keep up the great work!
-Lily

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks from the bottom of my heart! You gave such a precious time of yours to review my work, I am so grateful to you. I will take care of colours next time.

[Kleptomaniac]

I first enjoyed animals in circuses but after reading your work I am sorry for them.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Crazy Robot]

Poor animals..er..compassion for them..er..colourful words..er..like the poem..

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Lara Crimson]

“We see many animals and birds
Who are looking with their elegiac eyes.
Beasts are mostly in girds,
Standing in despair and cries."

Human greed is insatiable. He want to make profit by hook or by crook.
Now, about your work, It is very well that you displayed such a painful state of the animals in circuses. They want their freedom. The rhymes you used are good but the only thing I should bring under your notice is the vibrant use of colour. Take care of it next time. Lokking for more of your works.

[Raj Sahu]

Sorry for the inconvenience. I will take care next time.
Thank you again.

[Breadwinner]

The very first thing I want to tell you is the overuse of colours here and there...it strains my eyes oh! Such colours may lessen the effect of such a wonderful message you are delivering to the entire world...You can use bold or italics for the same..

[Raj Sahu]

Sorry for the inconvenience. I will take care next time.
Thank you for your words.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Many of life’s things and ways are done out of greed of man- greed to make money from others and animals with no care or concern for how it will impact animal/human? I agree so sad when animals are caged and then some people treat them so badly-well written - 🌹

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Pleasure🌹

[Resa]

A very well written, ,imaginative write.
👍
Resa

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[PoeticBlindness]

This is another one on different issue by you.
‘I am feeling myself guilty,
How offensive we became!
How one can show such cruelty?
I am feeling all ashame.'

I am glad that in the end you felt sorry for entire human race, which is too brutal with these animals. Circuses are jovial in nature but these circuses makes the surrounding gloomy. Thank you for sharing.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you again for your wonderful review.

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Beautiful, sad and true to point out the selfishness. Thanks for sharing!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot. 😊