Dark Side of a Circus

This poem give message that animals and birds should not be harassed.

Along with my family, I am visiting a Circus;

Very delighted and excited I am.

But suddenly; a painful sight jerk us

And everybody's cheek it slam.

We see many animals and birds

Who are looking with their elegiac eyes.

Beasts are mostly in girds,

Standing in despair and cries.

Hear what the bird say,

"Flying is my natural behaviour

but they clips my wings all day,

I feel a need of saviour."

And then the horse quoth,

"They tethers me with short rope

which I strongly loath

and only thing I want is to elope."

The dog is not far behind in saying,

"They locks me up in cage.

All mankind is betraying

and this act makes me enrage."

Then the elephant tell,

"I am waiting for an apostle,

To save me; as they compel

and beat me to keep me docile."

On hearing all; I feel an intense disgust,

Disgust for our selfishness.

It is our duty to entrust,

But we are surrounded by our greediness.

I am feeling myself guilty,

How offensive we became!

How one can show such cruelty?

I am feeling all ashame.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems

Reviews

[Eggplant]

This was a heartfelt poem. It really got a message across, on how animal circuses are horrible. I really was persuaded by this poem, and it gives me a new look on animal circuses. Your grammar is pretty good, except in a few spots :p The biggest thing that I would suggest that you change about this poem is the colors. The different colors when I first took a look at your poem confused me because there was so much going on. but then I realized it was the different voices of the animals. In the future, I would try to avoid this, for it kind of hurt my eyes to look at. If you want color, try to stay with one, and if you want to stress certain lines, make them bold, or italic. I'm sorry if that sounded a little bit harsh because I didn't want it to sound that way I feel that this poem brings so much emotion to the readers. It was like I was looking through the eyes of the animals stuck there in the circus. And the expanded vocabulary words, like quoth, and docile, and elegiac, really made your story so much better. Last little note, kudos on making your poem rhyme, because that is very hard to do when you are trying to convey a certain message, I really enjoyed your poem, and keep up the great work!
-Lily

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks from the bottom of my heart! You gave such a precious time of yours to review my work, I am so grateful to you. I will take care of colours next time.

[Karen John]

The message behind the poem is really inspiring.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.

[Karen John]

Please read my poems as well and leave a review. Thank you!

[Dara]

While watching a circus is most entertaining and fun, you have hit the proverbial nail on the head. It is only entertaining from the spectators point of view. I feel badly for the animals as well and much rather think of them roaming freely in their God given habitats. Well done!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! 😊

[Pumpkin Girl]

I love this poem it's very well written keep up the good work!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Pumpkin Girl]

Your welcome!

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine poem, and morally absolutly right ! Animals should live in a natural enviroment. My best wishes

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Truly sad and tragic poem...It behooves me to know we as humans can be so cruel toward another life...whether it be human or animal........ well-written piece...

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Onlyme]

Eloquently heartfelt poem. About the mistreat animals. Profound and moving. And make you see it from the animal's perspective.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you!

[Akki]

I think animals get there saviour. : )
I'm impress the thought you carved through this poem. Really, we never feel the pain of those animals who act on circus. We laugh, We Enjoyed and We felt Amazed by ignoring the feelings of them who can't express their feelings themselves.
I really like it.
Dude, your grammar and vocabulary is better than me. So, don't worry about it. Your grammar and english is good enough. But, you can try to improve it.
And thanks for sharing this poem with me, It's change my perspective against circus animals. I never think like that before. Keep Writing and Stay Tuned!

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks a lot! ☺

[Akash gaikwad]

I liked what you have written. A simple message with different animals perspective that's a good idea to make human being aware of what they are ignoring. Thank you for sharing.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much.

[Chris Shaw]

I hate the idea that animals are used to perform in circus acts. In the UK, that is no longer allowed, but I imagine it still goes on in some parts of the world. There have been such horrific acts of animal cruelty over the years involving circus acts, that I am delighted it is on the way out. This is a heartfelt poem and it is evident that you are an animal lover.

Chris

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Pooja]

Really sorrowful for such innocent animals.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you.