A Man's Wish

This poem is based on random thoughts of a man who has a farsight.

I feel I need to learn again,
The art of keeping time.
So more and more I can gain,
The success by keeping it as prime.
And more and more I constrain;
The obnoxious acts of mankind's crime.

The world needs to be helpful,
As the creator always taught us to be.
It needs to be forever youthful,
To help the needy; promptly one see.
This act will make the world more beautiful
And one will get help whenever he plea.

When I will learn to keep the time,
I will available for others readily.
I will render help to those who are grime
And humanity will run steadily.
Everywhere this act will sublime
And men will not charitable formally.

When the pot of everyone's kindness,
Will fill with their idle and waste hours.
All will do more and more acts of goodness,
So that the deprived ones will empower's.
God's love for this world is full of blindness
And we thanks him that he is ours.

Finally, I conclude; these are random ideas
And I wish that these may come true.
The world will fill with helpful petunias
And maybe these thoughts will spread anew.
All we need to spare time from all the areas
And work as an entire crew.

Author's Note

As you read that this poem is based on random thoughts of a man who has a far sight. He doesnot flatter in the poem but wishes that may he spares some time for mankind to help. He also insist others to opt this act so that the world will be beautiful. He also gave reference of God's love. May be some readers find this poem a little weird, but I said previously; these are just random thoughts.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

When I read your author's note, it sounds like you're anticipating rejection of your message. I encourage you to be confident in your truth and not worry about those who might not understand or like it. There will always be lovers & haters who read us.

Overall, I think your message is well-written & well-expressed to show a lighthearted optimism & encouragement to live our best lives. I like the various examples & details you use to show us what a best life might look like. I can understand everything, but once in awhile the construction of your English seems a little awkward to figure out the meaning or maybe it sounds wrong to the ear as far as spoken English. But you're doing well & just keep practicing to get better.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you very much Mam. You always inspires me. 😊

[Surya]

May be true....and may that hapoens...
I enjoyed it...:)

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much.

[Priyanshi]

"When the pot of everyone's kindness,
Will fill with their idle and waste hours.
All will do more and more acts of goodness,
So that the deprived ones will empower's. ".... beautiful lines.
Humanity must remain alive. Good deeds must be performed and bad acts must be vanished.... how beautiful the world would be. Good work, Raj. Keep it up.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you a lot dear Priyanshi. :)

[Priyanshi]

Pleasure in mine.

[CMC]

I'm inspired to write something, your message is like a gem buried in rock that I need to locate! This is phenomenal, and it's even more incredible that you wrote this with simple and random thoughts. The only way to unearth your deep message is to write a poem about it!!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you so much. I am delighted that I helped you indirectly. 😊

[wordman]

man kind,a losing battle,we are all caught up in our selves to even see the real world as it is

[Raj Sahu]

Thanks for your review.

[Bear]

Critique: (To help the needers;) the word "needers" doesn’t fit this context consider using the word "needy"
(So that the deprived ones will empowers) The verb "empowers" after the modal verb "will" is not in the correct form consider "empower's"
(And may be these thoughts will spread anew) maybe -

Review: Just a note, if you feel you have to explain your poem to your readers it inspires people to look for problems even if there are none. Believe in your work and deal with questions or comments if anyone has any. Personally I find the message uplifting and hopefully inspiring if only more were as insightful. Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear Bear. 😊😊

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. You write with a experience pen.
"When I will learn to keep the time,
I will available for others readily.
I will render help to those who are grime
And humanity will run steadily.
Everywhere this act will sublime
And men will not charitable formally."
The above lines stood out to me. You asked questions and open the door to thoughts to ponder. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you a lot dear Coyote. You always appreciate my work and I am grateful to you. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Isimbabi]

Nice one here. Barleygirl already said it all. It's a nice poem. I can't say I don't think about this all the time

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you dear.

[Najam Us Saher]

Random thoughts consisted in a heart so pure and kind. I really liked the thoughts of that person. I wish everyone thinks the same way. Simply heart touching and solacing to read.

[Raj Sahu]

Thank you a lot dear. I appreciate your support review and hope for such a support in future. 😊😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Please don't call dear. You're welcome. :)