a man with wings

A Story by raindroplove

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Midnight and the storm was hitting hard. My 3yr old son was crying for his mommy. All could do was lay there.I was crying out for someone and come get him and get him to safety .I knew I was dead. Yet, I saw him the man with wings. I saw him pick my son up and carry him away. I knew he'd be OK but I still wanted him to stay. I laid there waiting for the worst. then I saw the man again this time he was coming for me.
"Come child it time to go home." he said offering his hand
" Where is my son is he OK?" I asked
" Your son is fine now come."
Somehow i could move. Taking his hand we walked though the storm.
Then i saw a light
"Is that where we are going " I asked
"Yes, that will lead you home"
I didn't know what he was talking about for my home was destroyed but i followed
"Where is my son is he safe I have to go back and get him please let me go please let me go!"
"Your son is fine come child your almost there. "
We finally came to the light i looked back know there's no turning back. Then i step into the light.

it wasnt like i thought i would be you know the whole thing will the big feast and all the other stuff it wasnt there all that was there was a green field with a small brooke.

"where are we this isn't hevaen where are all the angels all the stuff they said was going to be here." i ask the angel

"this is just a stop place so i may tell you what is up to come come sit by the water"

we walked over to the brooke i sat down.

"what do you mean whats up ahead?"

"what do yoyu mean where i should go i was good all my life trusted god i think i went thought more then anoffe to say i going to hevan"

"that child is not for you to decide come your fisrt trial is about to began"

we stode up then i saw what looked like a hole at the far end of the fields it was coming towards us.

"your first trial is to walk in the dark i will be ther you must trust me "

We walk to the hole. i lookeeeeeed in it was dark

© 2011 raindroplove

Author's Note

yea...just to let you know this is partly real...... a three year old boy was found in a freezer and the cops asked how he got there he said a man with wings put him there thats why i didnt describe him more i wanted to stick to the normal story so.....yea

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Short.Nerd

This makes me want to read more:D Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago

gothicchica

diffrent but i liked it

Posted 13 Years Ago

Kindled Gargoyle

It's a very very interesting story! :) Just type a bit slower and remember the punctuation and grammar. :D

Posted 13 Years Ago

Bailey C. Writing

Midnight and the storm was hitting hard. My 3yr old son was crying for his mommy. All could do was lay there.

*It was midnight, and the storm was hitting hard. My 3 year old son was crying for his mommy. All I could do was lay there.

Yet, I saw him the man with wings.
*Yet, I saw him, the man with wings.

then I saw the man again this time he was coming for me.
*Then I saw the man again. This time he was coming for me.

"Come child it time to go home." he said offering his hand
" Where is my son is he OK?" I asked
" Your son is fine now come."

* Come child, it is time to go home." he said, offering his hand.
* "Where is my son. Is he ok?" I asked.
* "Your son is fine. Now come"

"Is that where we are going " I asked
* add ? after going.

it wasnt like i thought i would be you know the whole thing will the big feast and all the other stuff it wasnt there all that was there was a green field with a small brooke.
"It wasn't like I thought it would be. You know, the whole thing will be a big feast and all the other stuff. It wasn't there at all, all that was there was a green field with a small brook."

"where are we this isn't hevaen where are all the angels all the stuff they said was going to be here." i ask the angel
* Where are we? This isn't heaven. Where are all the angels, all the stuff they said was going to be here?" I asked the angel.

"what do yoyu mean where i should go i was good all my life trusted god i think i went thought more then anoffe to say i going to hevan"
"What do you mean where I should go? I was good all my life, I trusted God, I think I went through more than enough to say I'm going to heaven."

Lots of grammar mistakes and typos, I fixed just a few.
But this story seems to have a good, stable plot, it made me want to read more. It was intense and exciting, and you did a good job. Like I said, just the grammar and the typos need fixing :)
And it involved angels

Posted 13 Years Ago

Midnight and the storm was hitting hard. My 3yr old son was crying for his mommy. All could do was lay there.

*It was midnight, and the storm was hitting hard. My 3 year old son was crying for his mommy. All I could do was lay there.

Yet, I saw him the man with wings.
*Yet, I saw him, the man with wings.

then I saw the man again this time he was coming for me.
*Then I saw the man again. This time he was coming for me.

"Come child it time to go home." he said offering his hand
" Where is my son is he OK?" I asked
" Your son is fine now come."

* Come child, it is time to go home." he said, offering his hand.
* "Where is my son. Is he ok?" I asked.
* "Your son is fine. Now come"

"Is that where we are going " I asked 
* add ? after going.

it wasnt like i thought i would be you know the whole thing will the big feast and all the other stuff it wasnt there all that was there was a green field with a small brooke.
"It wasn't like I thought it would be. You know, the whole thing will be a big feast and all the other stuff. It wasn't there at all, all that was there was a green field with a small brook."

"where are we this isn't hevaen where are all the angels all the stuff they said was going to be here." i ask the angel
* Where are we? This isn't heaven. Where are all the angels, all the stuff they said was going to be here?" I asked the angel.

"what do yoyu mean where i should go i was good all my life trusted god i think i went thought more then anoffe to say i going to hevan"
"What do you mean where I should go? I was good all my life, I trusted God, I think I went through more than enough to say I'm going to heaven."

Lots of grammar mistakes and typos, I fixed just a few.
But this story seems to have a good, stable plot, it made me want to read more. It was intense and exciting, and you did a good job. Like I said, just the grammar and the typos need fixing :)
And it involved angels

Rating /100

Neva Flores Smith - Cha..

wonderful story

Posted 13 Years Ago

KATHY SUE SILLS

Very intense story, Hope you add more! Great job

Posted 13 Years Ago

Vanessa Rico

This was eerie and creepy in a good way! I am definitely interested to know more about this true story...about why the child was in the freezer. This was some pretty powerful stuff, and you wrote it beautifully! I was hooked!