the greatest love story

read it

something diffenrt 

about are love

something fresh and new 

like something from above 

lips cheery red 

i can't get you 

out of my head

you can be you 

ill be me 

one day i'll get on one knee 

and beg you please 

then your dad 

will give you away 

i say i do 

you will to 

we'll have our first kid

will name him after your dad 

he'll be wild

just like me

we'll get old 

sitting on the swing 

watching our grandkids sing

i'll go

and see my father above 

you wait the you'll come

we'll be forever 

and have the greatest love story ever 

 

Reviews

[Gone]

I love it!

[The Cute 1]

great job

[Butterfly Ninja :3]

cute poem but some words make some lines confusing "well be you forever" and some i believe you spelt wrong like 'are' instead of 'our' idk if it was on purpose?? but over all really nice :)

[A.G Franke]

not alot of detail (maybe add some more adverbs or adjtivees but it's clear that you like him. I do like the part that it indicates the faith in the love will last even after death. It's short, but yet to the point and sweet.
good work,
A.G.

[KAREN]

This is very sweet!