the greatest love story

read it

something diffenrt 

about are love

something fresh and new 

like something from above 

lips cheery red 

i can't get you 

out of my head

you can be you 

ill be me 

one day i'll get on one knee 

and beg you please 

then your dad 

will give you away 

i say i do 

you will to 

we'll have our first kid

will name him after your dad 

he'll be wild

just like me

we'll get old 

sitting on the swing 

watching our grandkids sing

i'll go

and see my father above 

you wait the you'll come

we'll be forever 

and have the greatest love story ever 

 

Reviews

[Mashairi]

growing old with your spouse is the greatest love story ever, and you've captured that in this poem very well. i enjoyed it :)

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

Wonderful

[Dragon]

Cool, amazing, whatever you want to call it, it’s there in this poem. This reminds me of little kids just meeting when they first saw each other. First they’re friends and then when they get older, they have no idea how to act around each other. I love this one and yeah, it’s sweet and cute. :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

simply lovely

[Jessiee]

awww how cute. great job :)

[Short.Nerd]

Aww... very good:)

[☯]

Very nicely written, and has a bit humor in it too. Great job :)

[Lily Mae]

I think you did a great job.. :) x

[Bailey C. Writing]

something diffenrt
about are love
*Something different
About our love
:p

lips cheery red
*Cherry
i say i do
you will to
*Too
will name him after your dad
*We'll
you wait the you'll come
*You wait, then you'll come?
well be you forever
and have the greatest love story ever
Well be you forever? *We'll? And then I don't get the last line
This was really sweet, awwww :) Just helping with grammar, as usual. Cute poem

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Te greatest indeed, well written, good read