i dare you

read it

my mind is out of its mind

its doing thing i dont do

its thinking i liked you

maybe it true

come on inside

i give you aride

let you see what  i see

let you be me

go though my troubles

i bet you see double

i bet you cant handle it

.......fill my shoes

i dare you......

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[whosaysyournotperfect1]

nice

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Alas no one can do as you ask this I believe is an angry poem and it is good to let anger flow with the ink truth is always better and stranger than fiction well done!

[Darius]

cool poem, i liked it :D the rhymes were very good

[Pollyanna]

Always double check spelling and grammar on all of your work; it makes it easier for the reader. Overall, still a very moving piece.

[Dragon]

Just like your screen name, you pelt words in this poem (with love too). You have amazing work in this. Sure it’s short, but it gives out meaning right away. Splendid job! :)

[Katannaism]

Gripping. And very bold. Straight forward, front and center. I admire you for this. This is an amazing piece that is very powerful. It just delivers a good smack.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I enjoyed the confident tone. It would help a lot to correct the spelling errors. The words themselves are good, but lose their meaning when they have to be deciphered.

[DearSweetAgony]

The feeling (in my opinion)overpowers the few mistakes.
I LOVE the feeling!
I LOVE the emotion!
I just LOVE this!

[Alexa Tasch]

a few spelling mistakes that made it a little hard for me to understand at first but all in all a great poem. very emotional and from the heart

[Bailey C. Writing]

its doing thing i dont do
*It's doing things I don't do.
Missed the s after thing :)
maybe it true
*Maybe it's true.
Forgot the ' s on it :p
i give you aride
*space a and ride, *I'll give you a ride
let you see want i see
*What
let you me
? Let you me? Let you be me? *
i bet you see doubble
*I bet you see double, or I bet you'll see double
Aggressive, passionate, I do like the poem, was just helping to fix grammar mistakes and typos. This is a heartfelt poem, and I liked it :) Good job