a childs life

a girl get perget because she was drunk

It hurts

What you did to me

know one care

how it was unfair

 

we were drunk

from somen in your trunk

i coundnt decide

it felt so right

 

the next day

i felt far away

 somen was wrong

 

i called

you didnt anwer

your not taking responssibility

of this moster at all

 

a childs life

nothen else

i cant do this

by myself  

Author's Note

this poem is not about me i just hate guys who do this

Reviews

[Bailey C. Writing]

i coundnt decide
it felt so right
*couldn't

your not taking responssibility
of this moster at all
*you're. *monster?

Just pointing out some typos/grammar issues to help

But goodness, I love this! So emotional, very heartfelt, so sad. Good job, you're a good writer :)

[Jake]

Great, emotive piece. Well written and expressing many themes and ideas. However, and I hate to do this because it was such a brilliant piece, good spelling and grammar gives of such a good impression. :P

[Mashairi]

This is an amazing piece. I'm always saddened to hear about a pregnancy and only one person is taking responsibility for it. All in all, another excellent job :)

[Tasha]

This was so powerful and strong and heartfelt too. It takes two to tango, and he's not a very good dance partner, nether the less this was a very good poem, I hope things work out for the best.