Gone

Involves Rape don't like don't read

Her screams were stifled

Her hair, was disheveled

She was bound

To expire

There was no one around

To save her

As he penetrated her deeper

Deeper she went into darkness

No use for her screaming

She stopped

No use for her her fighting

She stopped

She heard chuckling

Then a punch was what sent her completely into the dark

Where no one lives anymore

Only the souls to haunt her

And she was gone

Author's Note

Um I....don't know

Reviews

[J Harding]

Hey there, it's always hard to write this kind of thing, bit of an awkward subject really lol.

I thought you handled it well, although maybe a few lines were too long, they interrupted the flow of the piece. Things like her hair, was dishevelled, perhaps could be changed to her hair; dishevelled.

Just an idea, nice piece :)

Cheers

[Kimmi]

Very deep and dark. You were brave to pick a topic like this, as it is very touchy for most people. I think you pulled it off really nicely :)

[Simone]

wow, hectic stuff. Considering the subject, you handeled it amazingly well. Wonderfull writing, dark but touching. Amazing work- keep it up! I am truely impressed.

[Shannon]

Beautiful, the subject really strikes a chord and its so descriptive that you almost feel as though your inside the girls head. I agree with Elli, you lied about not being able to write

[awkward turtle]

I feel like this should be in a psychology book, in the section about how rape affects the victims. seriously, this is so powerful in so few words. If i had to guess, this is how anyone who has been unfortunate enough to experience anything like this feels while it is happens. just...wow.

[carla]

really touched me
many can't express what they never expirenced

[Sharkapillar]

you liar, you told me you couldn't write XD
maybe 'this is weird, but I loves it Great job!!
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