Your All I See

Its about a relashinship im going threw at the moment

All i really see is you in my eyes

The mist getting my hair wet

Why do you make urself so hard to resist

All i want to do is love you forever and on

But you dont feel for me

But you dont feel for me

when i met you the sun shown in my face

I smiled for the first time

Cant you come back to me

Why cant you come back to me

Your All I see

Reviews

[Aurora Lynn]

Over-all a good poem. I see that you've been through this, because you describe it so vividly in your poetry. Other than the chatspeak, which I have adressed in other reviews, this poem is perfect.

One line that I like was 'when i met you the sun shown in my face/I smiled for the first time' Pure poetry (no pun intended) Keep up the good work!

[Shiningwolf]

How sweet