Mask of Mine

A poem I wrote. :) For some reason I can only write depressing poems... and yet I'm a very happy person xD

I am alone.
No one to help me, no one to save me from my dark hole that travels down,
down,
down,
down.
I wear a mask of happiness;
Painted on is joy and laughter.
But behind this mask of mine is a broken soul,
a broken heart
That cries of
Loneliness and sadness,
Despair and pain,
Anger and death.
This mask of mine
Is a cloak of hidden wonders
Hiding my eyes
That reveal me falling down,
down,
down,
down,
Into the pit of despair.
This mask of mine
Hides my looking-glass
Hides my pain
Hides my anger
Hides my heart
Hides my death.
My heart is pierced
My heart is wounded
My heart is dead
Behind this mask of mine.

Reviews

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

Imagery is really expressed here, as well as the feelings. Defnatley something people can relate to. Excellent write :))

[CrashDavis47]

Great read, the feelings are strong and expressed well

[Budd Black]

I love the imagery of the painted mask. ending with another down, down, down might give it more balance, but it is already very good.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

finely composed poetic~ well tuned emotional presentation with solid expressives~

[Rikkevi Rue]

excellently crafted, it slowly weaves the reader into your web of despair. Oddly I felt there was something more you had to say...but nonetheless this creates an emotional impact.

[KAREN]

Very deep and full of emotion! Most everyone can relate to this poem! I can!

[Cricket Kidd]

I can relate. I've noticed that lots of writers feel this way and write about it. it makes my heart hurt, which is a good thing. I don't read very many things that make me feel emotion so strongly. good job!

[Dark Aeris]

I love the parallelism used. :D
really does leave me amazed as if I were traveling down , one with the poem.

[Secretly Mellisa Hasbee..]

Its wonderful and slighlty sad but its is amazing... keep it up:)

-Love 'Mellisa Hasbeen'

[sarah]

boy this is a super powerful work! good write! and awsome to read