I'm fine

To all those who ask me, what is in her that I love her so much, this is:

All I hope is that

one day...

One day if I could lend you my eyes,

You will see what beauty is.

You will see beauty

in her fine eyes.

Those which will compel

you to drown in her depth.

You will see beauty

in her fine smile.

That which will make

you fall for her every time.

You will see beauty

in her fine face.

More beautiful than any other...

One day if I could lend you my ears,

You will hear what beauty is.

You will hear beauty

in her fine laughter.

That which will force

you to laugh with her.

You will hear beauty

in her fine voice.

That which will make

you forget everything else.

You will hear beauty 

when she calls your name.

When you realise your

name was so beautiful.

When you feel your name

is so safe in her fine lips...

One day if I could lend you my fingers,

You will touch what beauty is.

You will touch beauty

in her fine skin.

So soft, you won't 

put your hands off.

You will touch beauty

in her fine hands.

Those which if are in

yours, you own the world.

You will touch beauty

in her fine hair.

Curling at the perfect

place, adding beauty

to the beautiful...

One day if I could lend you my lips,

You will kiss what beauty is.

You will kiss beauty

in her fine lips.

So tempting, you would 

kiss her endlessly.

You will kiss beauty

in her fine forehead.

That which will 

make her yours forever.

You will kiss beauty

in her fine cheeks.

The love that she'll

give you would definitely

leave you wordless...

And then would you realise what beauty is.

And when you ask her, "How are you?"

She'll just say, "I'm fine."

Author's Note

In case you missed I played with the word 'fine' in the entire poem.

Reviews

[Stephen Scaggs]

I really liked the structure of the poem and I thought it was very creative. Thank you for asking me to read this. I like how the poem flows with the first part being about what you can see, the second part being more about her laughter, etc. Very methodical and it sounds very real. Thanks again!

Rating: 9.5/10.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thanks a lot. It gives me delight to see you liking it.

[Writeforlovely]

Beautiful! Flows nicely and i like how it reaches all of the senses!

xoxo

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you for your appreciation. :)

[Trisha Roy]

amazing poem indeed..... loved the way it has been carved with beautiful feelings and expression of words...happy writing :)

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you for your amazing feedback. :)

[emmajoy]

' And when you ask her, "How are you?" - She'll just say, "I'm fine." ' - that last line is charming.. such a rarity.

Romance still lives!

What a wonderfully loving poem.. methinks probably based in the truth, if not.. should be leased to those wanting to show a lover how she's adored. Finely worded thoughts, laid in the public domain yet still very personal and more.

[Rahul Chhabra]

The fact that you liked it makes me feel great. Thanks a lot.. :) :)

[emmajoy]

You're very welcome.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Awesome write :) and i didn't miss that you played with the word fine. Nice work.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Haha. Thanks. :)

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are welcome :)

[DedPoet]

The repetition of the word is effective, a considerable consistency in a finely cracyed piece. The opening of each senses is strong, though the following verses could use stronger metaphorical allusions to add color to an otherwise vibrantly constructed poem. All in all, solid foundation.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thanks a lot for your valuable criticism. I totally agree with what you say. Will take care in future and will ask you to have a read. :)

[Kiana]

"One day if I could lend you my fingers,
You will touch what beauty is."
This line seriously gives me chills! The entire thing evokes a lot of emotion!
You did a great job with it!
Tfs :) x.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Each and every word of this review makes me feel elated. Thank you for reading it so dearly. :)

[Kishore Chandran]

Beautiful poem Rahul. Keep writing.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you Kishore. Sure I will. :)

[Shivam Murari]

This sure was one deep descriptive poem. Describing your lover, the one who covers your entire world, the one whose face you see in every crowd when they are not around and you miss all the crowds when they are around. There is beauty in their look, touch, feel and romance. You expressed that very metaphorically. A fascinating write.

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you for your detailed response. :)

[Shivam Murari]

Welcome :)

[Ana B.]

A wonderful gateway to the heart of romantic hearts......may we all reunite with our love, at least in the dreams....

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you Ana. :)

[SakuraBloomFlowers]

Beautiful Poem, My good friend

[Rahul Chhabra]

Thank you. :)