3 Haiku Poems

1

City, traffic, vehicles, speed

The walker stops suddenly

Touched by the silence within.

2

He shouts at wolf in ambush

“I am only a herdsman

The true shepherd is in temple”

3

Walking alone in forest

No body, no mind

He is turning into forest.

Reviews

[Corrupthoughts]

Very well said, all of them. The second is perhaps my fav as the message it holds is a strong one, perhaps even a rebellion to religion? The last one has a great point to it, but I must admit I am thrown off by the double use of 'forest' I feel it is way to close together and therefore clutter. I would change the second 'forest' to 'the trees' or something along those lines. Still, these three are very well done. I enjoyed them a lot.

[Sukriti Suki]

This is nice...I like this, the idea of 3 but like a story. Though I agree, the last line could be changed a bit but then it is personal choice. Overall, enjoyable.

[Raghavendra M]

Thank you so much for the review. I liked you pointing out repetition of word forest. I would take care of these things in next piece.