Weird.

It's odd.

isn't it weird?

how you want to feel numb

sometimes you don't want to feel a thing

numb.

numb is the absence of feeling

yet, you want to feel that way?

it's weird isn't it. 

how the world works.

how it turns

how people can over power

how people can kill

as usual

it's a sick world.

disgusting.

it's weird, isn't it.

how people make you feel numb

it's either the butter flies in your stomach

of the pain you feel in your chest

sometimes you're just too happy

you're blinded

sometimes you're just so hurt

to see.

makes sense?

i didn't think so.

but it's weird, isn't it?

Author's Note

Just tell me what you think. How I should sequence. I'm very opened to learning. Thanks. :)

Reviews

[Anita Harris]

Hello! Very lovely poem. I like the idea and setup you've established. If I could give any advice, it would be to create a flow. In the poem you go from feeling numb, to how the world works, to feeling numb again. It seems like when you were writing you had an idea set of what you wanted to write about, but just got lost in writing that you lost touch with that idea. I do that ALL THE TIME. Aha. What really helps with sticking to the subject and creating a great flow is: an outline. Outlines help so much. I feel if you tried making one, and sticking with it ,your writing would be flawless. Because right now it's pretty close to it. I like your ideas, and really hope to read more from you! :)

[ragelmarli]

Thank you so much it means a lot! :)

[James Hamilton]

Great poem. It´s very honest and absolutly truth. And by the way its well written, too. :)

[ragelmarli]

thank you!

[Anita Harris]

Oh yeah! Welcome to WritersCafe! :)

[ragelmarli]

Again, thank you :)
I'm so happy I found a website that helps me with my writing. Hopefully I'll go far with it. :)