Our Broken Tree

You left. I miss you. I'm waiting here now. For the time I can reach you, under the shine of the moon.

Our Broken Tree

Sitting down.
Staring at the sky.
Wishing I could be
Where the moon shines high.

Wishing I could be
There with you.
You said I'd be with you.
I'll give you 'til the count of two.

You've visited before
When the moon shines high.
I'm sitting here now.
Was it all just a lie?

I'm getting impatient
Waiting for your glow.
Your familiar hug,
The one cold as snow.

Wait.
Just wait.
I see you now.

Mangled head to toe.

But just like always,
Is the face I love and know.

You float over the ground
Coming closer and closer.
I stand up and greet you
With open arms.

Your smile,
Tell me that it's okay.
That I'm always
The highlight of your day.

It's hard to believe
That right now you're gone.
But as I lie back down with you
An idea has spawn.

If I cross over
I can be with you.
We can be alone.
Just us two.

But when I tell you,
You become alarmed.
Saying "No! Not Yet!
I don't want you to be harmed."

I sit up and apologize,
Say I'd never do that.
Say I'll wait my time
And all that jazz.

As we sit together,
By our broken tree,
I can go back in time
To how it used to be.

Author's Note

Wow. Two poems in one day. Well, I'm feeling poetic.

I miss him sometimes, wish that I could just see him...THEM. Wish that they didn't have to leave me so soon...But, hey. The pen is mightier then thy sword. No use being angry anymore. What's done is done. But I still can't help but feel sad...

Sorry, ranting. Missing people sucks, y''know? Anyway...I think I'm done...Poem seems a little confusing, but whatever. ^^

Reviews

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Sorry, had to spazz. *ahem* SERIOUS REVIEW TIME. EVEN THOUGH I DONT WANT TO REVIEW. OR READ. OH WELL.

First of all - I loved this. The wording is perfect, keeping that melancholy feeling, and the words themselves are beautiful. The "all that jazz" line made me feel...I don't know. Normal? It made it seem as if it wasn't all just sad little imagery stuff, but also teenagery. F**k, I dont know what the f**k I'm trying to say. WHATTHEFUCKEVER ANYWAY. *ahem* I love the images the lines created in my mind, with the light shining and the outstretched arms. This poem is so beautiful and so sad. I love it. Which i said already. Like, twice or something. OH F*****G WELL.

Whelp, I don't know whatthehell this is about, but whatever it is, I am sorry. I wish you didn't have gone through it, and blahblahblah I'm not gonna get all sappy or emotional or say a whole bunch of stuff like "it's okay" 'cause...pfffff it TOTALLY gelps. YAY FOR BEAUTIFUL POEMS.

Sorry. xD I cant be serious because when i get serious I feel depressed and weird. Trust me, I can be when I want to be. But meh, seriousness isn't fun.

Damn, I just dont know how the f**k to stay on topic do I? My mind just jumps all over the place and--- *smothered*

I'm just gonna end this review. THIS POEM IS BEAUTIFUL, I LOVE IT, AND IM SORRY.

Oh, and yeah you gotta be feeling poetic. definitely. xD Pen is mightier. That reminds me of that commericial when--

F**K OFF TOPIC AGAIN. *ahemforthethirtiethtime* Yes, missing people f*****g sucks more than anything in the world. Well, almost more than anything. T^T

BYE. AND THIS TIME I MEAN IT FOR REALS. XD

[RachelReaper]

I really like how you made this different then most "I miss you" poems by putting a vision in the reader's head that you still get to see them. Very touching and emotional

[Buzz_Reynolds]

great writing! it flowed nicely and the slight confusion in it just added to it so don't be sorry! nice write!

[nicolo]

"You're familiar hug," --it's 'your'
this is it when a heart speaks.

[deeps]

I felt a certain kind of longing in this write.
Straight from the heart. Like it.

[✪Miki-chanϪ..]

awsome :) I wish i was just a great a writer as you are :)

[Miss Fox]

It's so.. realistic. I can see him. I can see you. I can see the tree. And I understand the want, or the need, to be with him. Beautiful poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

It's love that breaks the mind, a tree is subsequent of your write, well done, I felt read write was in order but after my third reading it sits well, well done.

[Chris]

I felt the longing while I was reading this. It is simple, yet sincere enough to stay away from blandness. It's kinda like petals being carried by the wind.

[LoneWolf]

This is one of those few poems that I really feel compelled to comment on, it's simplistic, sincere, and worded with care. A rose for your loss @--}---- and a rose for your eloquent tribute @--}-----