Goodbye

She looked out the window,
At the luminous sky,
Searching for the ones she'd lost,
Aching for a last goodbye.

She craned her neck,
Urging the blue to appear.
She had waited months for the sea,
To unearth a home for her tears.

She gazed at the portrait,
She had made last night.
She held it close to her heart,
Where it felt just right.

She was proud of her art,
It mirrored all her love.
She hoped and invoked,
That he could see it from above.

Now she stood in the sand,
Unable to weep.
She was tired of promises,
The ones he couldn't keep.

She scuttled towards the water,
An infinitesimal creature in the sea.
She walked closer to the horizon,
To set him free.

She folded her portrait,
The way he had taught her to.
Then she set it amid the waves,
The way he would do.

Her heart stood in her eyes,
As the boat sailed away.
She smiled, knowing her gift
Would reach her father someday.

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

I stand corrected.

So emotive.
So real.

Fewer words describe the power and beauty behind such pieces.
Good work, definitely.

[Radhika]

Thanks, it means a lot :)

[Zahra]

Beautiful write by a young talented poetess. Liked the flow and rhyming :)

[Radhika]

Thank you so much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"She scuttled towards the water,
An infinitesimal creature in the sea.
She walked closer to the horizon,
To set him free."
A sad and beautiful poem. Hard to release someone. I like the way you described the thoughts and the emotion in the poem. The above lines were my favorite. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. Life teaches us many things. We hope one day to meet the people we lost once again.
Coyote

[Radhika]

Thank you so much for the valuable feedback.
Really appreciate it! :)

[Saddam]

Her heart stood in her eyes,
As the boat sailed away.
She smiled, knowing her gift
Would reach her father someday.

It is so different poetry. Carried all kind of emotional attainment. Any one can be related. God, द्वन्द्व नज़र आ रहा है। Love this.

[Radhika]

Thank you :)

[SimpleMind]

A very emotional piece! Father and daughter love is vividly penned on this,.. a great one!

[Radhika]

Thanks a lot :)