Gravity

A sad story.

I.
So well she used her gravity
Ideas and relativity
Escaping through the open door
From smiley condescending lore
Keep falling with intent of joy
Seek safety, love, an easy ploy
Still underneath the hazard suit
Which failed to build a parachute
She flittered down with subtlety
So well she used her gravity

II.
So well he used his gravity
With unified tranquility
Escaping through the tender portal
Suffers such a fate immortal
Keep hanging from the tree of life
Seek paradise from mental strife
“I’m coming girl, you taught me how”
And with his noose he took a bow
He dropped with such tenacity
So well he used his gravity

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tobi]

I loved this poem, excellent rhyming that never seemed awkward or forced to tell a touching story.