Oblivion

to all the people who saw me everyday and never did a damn thing to stop me

These silent haunting screams

will never be heard

you sit in oblivion

and utter not a word

 

these hands I feel upon me

are so life-like & real

you sit in oblivion

with a face made of steel

 

this razor to my wrist

it's just so damn good

you sit in oblivion

claiming you did all you could

 

this full glass in my hand

the liquid burns all down my throat

you sit in oblivion

making me a scapegoat

 

the cancer between my fingers

going to my lungs

you sit in oblivion

saying there's nothing to be done

 

the bruises on my body

so easy to see

you sit in oblivion

making life what you want it to be

 

the noose around my neck

is getting tighter everyday

you sit in oblivion

with nothing else to say

 

my body in a coffin

planning a funeral date

you say "I sat in oblivion

and now it's too late"

 

if only you could see

these rivers running red

if you weren't in oblivion you'd know

I'm already dead

Reviews

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

This is a masterpiece-seriously, this is just absolutely beautiful and enchanting in its' every single, sorrow-full and destructive way! What you wrote about and the way you wrote this is absolutely magnificent-I'm sure many can relate to this poem, and I really feel that I can. I love the word choice, too-'oblivion', what a fantastic word! I'm in awe... This is going to my favourites; thank you for sharing this!

[♪GetUse2MyMelodie..]

Wow, I find this very emotional from personal experiences of mine. I can feel the rawness creeping. Plus, I really like the repeatition.
Nice work.

[topsyturvy]

Wow this was an incredible write.
"if only you could see
these rivers running red
if you weren't in oblivion you'd know
I'm already dead"

I loved those lines the most. Especially the river running red bit. Cleverly made. :)

[[<3~*~ButterflyXxXKisse..]

Breath taking.

[Peach]

This really spoke to me, "wow" is all I can say. Fantastic piece of writing.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Wow, nice work.

[Dakota]

This is raw and deep. Your flow is good and your imagery is vivid. Great ink here!

[JB Murray]

Dreary, haunting... I think you probably could have done without a few of the verses, making the overall effect of the poem a bit more sharp and sudden... but all in all, a fantastic write!

[Rhine Wolf]

Brilliantly written!! deep with emotion!! the world is so wrapped up in its self to care for another, this portrays the here and now beautifully. and so sadly!

blessed be

[HorrorMaster]

very good i enjoy it

[Nyida Strong]

We are, none of us, dead. Not yet. I know that pain, I know what drove the pen that wrote this. Pain makes us live, even though it seems to be the opposite.

N. Strong