Darkness And Dispair

So many have fell
into this trap.
a trap full of sadness and pain
that makes u feel like crap.
 

this trap is a hole
dug deep in the ground
with steep sides
so when you fall, an end isn't found
 

only time that u r saved
is when someone is kind enough to throw a rope
if you latch on
this gives u hope
 

yet you may get many or a mere 1
you never know
so latch on now
or falling forever you will go.
 

Reviews

[eli mercuree rue]

Reliance on others.. yeah I'm trying to move away from that idea not to say that at times we shouldn't look for ropes to latch onto. Sometimes vulnerabilty is the only thing that allows us to grow.

I think the poem can be improved with consistent capitalization

other than that it's a pretty good poem

[Alaina]

I really liked this, its very true , we have a support system when we need help, we need to use it. It doesnt mean we rely on others for everything it means were mature enough to ask for help when its truely necessary.
I love your work, its all so nicely written.
Well done keep up the good work!

[steph]

very nice. i try not to rely on others. because in the end all i do is get hurt. read my poem call YOU. you'll see what i mean.

[Gibby]

I have read all your poems this morning and the one thing that stands out to me is that you have a great use of wording. A lot of times, people use really large words in poem and it looses the meaning. You don't do that and the meaning in your work comes through.