The Butterfly Within

A poem resembling a childhood imaginary creature, I use to see. That gave me hope and a sense of excitement to embrace my imagination. I am reminiscing this part of me, I rarely find within.

Its wings latch the periwinkle shade mauve interior

Closing my eyes, engaging in a universe so surreal 

I experience the luminescence slowly transpiring into vitality

It exhibits an aura, so rare one must blink twice to make sense of the actuality

A creature that embodies such an alluring physique

Making swift strides, as it glides in the sky 

Absorbing the rainbow, one color at a time

In return a vibrant universe, that a hidden rainbow can not always let shine though, emerges

The innocence within, creates the magical atmosphere hearing each fizzle, and explosion; boomeranging over the Cinderella Castle you once loved

When danger appears, the blanket of comfort wrapping ever so tightly, as I close my eyes

I imagine the vivid dots of light, revitalizing again

A miracle upon every encounter 

Not always present, or touchable

But the spirit of a butterfly always will reside within.

Author's Note

A piece i just wrote. I want to share this with my class for a workshop grade. So any feedback of changes, or grammatical errors would be much appreciated! Also, tell me what this poem means to you. Did you relate? Do you remember a significant memory, or event triggered from reading this? Thanks! :) xoxo

Reviews

[AG Condor]

It’s very good. Minus the word “revitalizing”. Sounds like something cosmetological.
Otherwise I’m happy. “Absorbing the rainbow, one colour at a time” and “vibrant universe” point to the pith of poetry. And “the butterfly within” is all the poetry is about.

[Chris]

Unicorns and The Faerie, moonlight glow across shimmering weaves of the eventide tonals... The behind the eyes visions we so hold dear and close... Lust and wish-full dreams - of hope-full hearts.

So many visions and visionaries.

[Rachel]

Thank you so much for your feedback! I am happy you could take something from this piece! :)

[Author_Unknown]

This was a very very beautifully described piece. The way you painted a picture not only of the creature's physical appearance but also its "aura" was truly touching. Indeed this is a very nice piece and I hope you keep up the beautiful work.

[CarpetSharx7]

It's beautiful! Just absolutely gorgeous! The way you use personal experience as a bridge between people! Amazing!

[Rachel]

Oh wow! You brought a smile to my face! Thank you for you're words of feedback, they are taken into consideration, and I love to hear it! :) xoxo!