Still

I succumb

To the stillness of the night,

The calming breeze,

The city lights

Just outside my window.

 

I lay, frozen-

Lost in thought-

In a rush of emotion.

I look out

And see stars twinkling

In velvet blue.

 

The rails guarding my window pane

Couldn’t keep me

From being one with the wind.

It brushes my face

Like a lover’s hand-

Soft, carefree, and loving.

 

The dim lights communicate with me,

And the stars dance in all their glee,

But ‘tis the stillness that captured me-

The peace,

That soft breeze

Enveloping the sleeping city.

 

And for a while,

Before I went to sleep,

I felt a sense of bliss.

Reviews

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

I personally believe there is magic in the night, and by sleeping we enter another world where fantasy is reality, and bliss is like breathing. You opened your poem with a sense of stillness however, along with the lines, the reader traveled with your poem in search for that one night where dreaming is anything but forbidden.

My favorite lines:
The rails guarding my window pane
Couldn’t keep me
From being one with the wind.

Fly away, I say.
Wonderful write. Maybe she never slept at all, and her dreams and reality became one that night? Just a thought. :)

Keep writing Rach!
Lex :)

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

savour this one moment in time.....I like the imagery and the flow rachielle.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love feeling a breeze coming in my window at night when I sleep. It is relaxing to hear the leaves in the trees. Love the imagery and the flow is easy to follow as well

[Jasmarine]

The sense of when you become one with nature...except in the city. Everyone has those moments when you sit so still, so quietly for soo long you get a feeling of absolute....god, I can't think of the word now. How ridiculous. Basically of being the nature that surrounds you and feeling what it does.

[Ruth]

The sense of nliss, even if momentarily in this, is beautifully portrayed xx

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I felt it too, just now.

[Tate Morgan]

Very nice

[Daniel Gardner]

BRAVO is all i can say!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. The description was smooth and soft in your words. Like a kind whisper. The story was very good and the ending was perfect. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[♥(heatherawesome..]

awesome

[Shalini Dinesh]

a very slow and a peaceful kind of poem, like a lullaby, the night has its own beauty and your beautiful poem brought that out