Daddy's Girl

Another old poem I found in my 2009 journal.

Fear spreads-
Poison in my veins;
For a reason
My heart can't contain.

Tears fall
Flowing like a river-
Still he stands,
And remains my father.

Like a child
Afraid of the dark,
Fear bounds my soul;
He left his mark.

With silence,
He tortured;
With a look,
He killed.

Fear pierced
My heart,
Left a hole
Like a pointed dart.

The hollow
Can't be filled
Until words appear
And provide me a shield.

Reviews

[♥(heatherawesome..]

love it a lot and you did awesome on your poem and i love it a lot LOL LOL LOL LOL

[ashley]

This is amazing. The rhyming is flawless. I love this. Fantastic job! :D

[Daniel Gardner]

Very emotional. Well written though.

[Shalini Dinesh]

a good poem...

[JenLyn]

I can completely relate to this, I was terrified of my Father but things got better as I got older but it still doesn't make the things he said he did right. It was a good write, the rhyme was nice and not forced. Keep it up! :) 100/100

[Amy Bumpas]

This is a very sad poem...makes you wonder why a father
could make his daughter feel this way..maybe, just
doesn't pay attention. I myself have never really had a father
figure in my life so I understand this more than I want to. It seems the
hurt never goes away.

[MissWordSmith]

looks like we all got daddy issues. this was a very emotional, observant write. though my father and I have issues, they are different to your father's.. however... my mum's dad is like a DITTO to what you have described here. I felt this. I could relate too. Really great insight, and powerful but simple way of getting across.

[Libby McKeown]

With silence he tortured...what a great stanza! I like the rhyme in this (usually rhyme is extremely poorly done), but there are places where the rhyme takes precedence over content (heart, and hole like pointed dart), and this distracts from your work. The whole poem kind of reminds me of a teardrop. Thank you for sharing such a personal read!

[AbsentElements]

Everyone has issues with their parents at times, sadly some are worse than others. This is a very powerful peace, it reveals the hatred towards him. I can't say I can relate, having not known my father much before he passed, but I'm sure had he ended up so... hateful, I would have expressed my anger the same way. Very intense write.