Daddy's Girl

Another old poem I found in my 2009 journal.

Fear spreads-
Poison in my veins;
For a reason
My heart can't contain.

Tears fall
Flowing like a river-
Still he stands,
And remains my father.

Like a child
Afraid of the dark,
Fear bounds my soul;
He left his mark.

With silence,
He tortured;
With a look,
He killed.

Fear pierced
My heart,
Left a hole
Like a pointed dart.

The hollow
Can't be filled
Until words appear
And provide me a shield.

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Ah destructive poisonous relationships more often than not between fathers and daughters Men do not understand the emotions of women

[Devons]

This is truly very good and speaks volumes for many a similar destructive emotional tie that recurs in all kinds of relationships. And the irony of the title 'Daddy's Girl' is quite profound. Also, the last two lines say a lot about how much art is a catharsis. Well done, this.

I'm reminded of a poem by Philip Larkin which begins:

"They f**k you up, your Mum and Dad,
They don't mean to, but they do."

[Rick Puetter]

Dear rachielle,

A father is a powerful figure in a daughter's life. Sometimes I don't think the fathers quite understand just how important they are. He might not have known how much you were looking for his support and approval: "With silence, / He tortured; / With a look, / He killed."

I like your short, to the point phrasing. The rhyme isn't perfect, but there is tremendous power in your words, and this is amplified by the terseness of the piece.

Well done again.

Best regards,

Rick

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

wow i dont know what to say this is kind of heartbreaking to read but it probably felt good to write this to let it out is better than keeping it in. hope the person who this poem was written about found healing within. good poem. very poignant write

[Jasmarine]

DAMN...I sure hope this isn't based on true events hun. It sounds like a child who has suffered abuse and thinks it's her fault, even though it most likely isn't. It's almost like those stories you hear on the news when the dad goes too far one day, this being before that happens.

[Gheeneil]

Each stanza may be short but it speaks volumes. Each line runs as deep as the wound he caused her, I would say.

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Your poems reflect a very personal story of you.
They are quite reminiscent of confessional poetry by Sylvia Plath. You should read her once in a while. :)

Stay strong,
Lex

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

This is a sad one..Don't know what happen...Divorce...Abuse...More than abuse..Keep the creative pen flowing..Sunflower

[Miranda Caitlyn]

Wow! This is incredible and the title made it even more powerful. GREAT job. Beautiful, amazing!

[PaperHearts]

This was an amazing write! I loved it! :) It was so taut with tension and emotion, and when I was reading it, I felt like I was drawn right into the moments you were describing. I thought that the last two stanzas were stunning. Fantastic write!
~PaperHearts