Nowhere to Go

Things weren't what I expected them to be.
Suddenly,
The world changed,
And I find myself going round and round a maze
Of unwinding walls and staircase.

Foreign neon lights surround me
In the unfamiliar streets I try to flee.
I look for something, anything
To take me home;
But I got lost along the way.

In the blink of an eye,
I am six feet above the ground
With no courage to cry,
And no idea where I'm bound.

For once in my life,
I should be scared,
But I'm not;
Because I'm happy
Wherever this road may lead me.

Reviews

[AbsentElements]

Very Visual...Very detailed. Amazing write.

[Devons]

Mysterious and faintly alluring like the unidentified scent of a life. It seems to impress upon the reader that -though you may find yourself lost or trapped- the 'way out' will somehow be found. Even though, in this case, it would seem to imply that this way out may be death - but is death an exit to be feared?

This is what I took from the poem. But, as I said, it is mysterious, so it may not be what you intended.

[Jasmarine]

Almost like an epiphany [sp?] when someone realizes a certain aspect about themselves that shocks them. Can't say this has happened before to me though, just relationships that taught me different things..ANYWAYS, it's interesting how you set the scene in a city, using a place where an individual is comfortable but then becomes agitated when they discover a new place. Humans don't like change, but once we get used to it, either because we have too or we just adjust to it, life seems better. Until the next road bump comes along. Good job :)

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

I love the change of mood in the last stanza. From a struggle to flee to accepting reality, the poem took us to these phases like how a story goes to a denouement from climax.

In the end yes, let us just let life take us away. :)
Keep it up Rach!

Lex

[JenLyn]

Good write, keep it up! 100/100

[Wake Up!]

Not much to say besides the fact that I love it. I don't think I've read a single poem of yours that I could find something wrong with it. Keep up the excellent work, dear. XOXO,

Ridgy

[PaperHearts]

Nice write! I really liked the feel of this poem, and the way you created the scene around the whole idea of the person on a journey. My favourite part of your poem was the second stanza, in particular the line 'I look for something, anything/To take me home;', as it seemed to capture a feeling that I could relate to. There were a few moments I found where you drifted between past and present tense, but other than that, this was a great write! :)
~PaperHearts

[Amy Bumpas]

A positive attitude about the uncertain roads one takes
throughout their lives.

[MissWordSmith]

absolutely agree with poeticbeauty79 here... the contrast was brilliant. ty 4 sending this request!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the contrast between the unfamiliar surrounding and to actually being happy about where this unfamiliar environment may take you. Eye opening write.