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She isn’t the gold

You expected her to be.

Don’t you get sold

So easily.

 

She is Mercury-

She’ll creep up inside

Silently

And stay there to bide.

 

Once she attacks,

You have nowhere to hide

Even though you watch your back;

You can’t escape if you tried.

 

She will envelop you

In her sugar coated ways

And then inject her venom

Without a bit of trace.

 

Don’t be fooled

By her pretty little smile-

It’s just her tool

To exhaust a clever lie.

 

So when you think

You’re falling for her,

Before you sink,

Look into your mind deeper.

 

What you think is your golden ticket

Might just be a dangerous card.

What I say, don’t you forget-

Or she might just break another heart.

Reviews

[jon wells]

great flow with even better meaning!
i liked the last verse in particular, alot of people(me in particular) can't finish a piece off that well

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

The images of drugs and addiction come to mind. well written.

[AbsentElements]

A very creative piece. There aren't many words to describe it just...Intelligent. Very nice write.

[JenLyn]

Very well written, awesome flow and rhyme scheme and very true people can be very deceiving especially when they want something bad enough. Great write! Keep it up! :) 100/100

[An owl on the moon]

This is a write that just creeps inside you and stirs those thoughts that things aren't always what they seem. Expectations turned upside down. Very well written!

[Robert Fachowski]

Nice. I dig this, like a shovel. I like the verse on Mercury.
I don't have a thing against breaking hearts. Its part of life. Only thing that sucks is if the person is purposely breaking them. Which sucks. Like a lollipop.
4 and a half thumbs up on the poem

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Ha! :)

[SoulofManyFaces]

I've known people like this, and that type of negative
energy will just drag you down. Once again there is a lot
of emotion, a personal message as well. I feel you write to
get things off your chest, like a release.

[SK Woodiwiss]

Again well done. I feel every mother's son should read this one. It is very dangerous to think of someone beyond what is human - so many disappointments but also so much pressure to be what you are not.
You have a serious skill please continue.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Putting anyone on a pedestal is a grave error in judgement. Beauty in art and nature is generally outward but outward beauty in people is generally cause for vanity which in turn creates ugliness of spirit. No outward beauty can ever compensate for an ugly heart or soul. Great write.