Daddy

With your sinewy hands

The concrete path of my being was formed

You are my superman-

You’d rescue me in a storm.

You picked up sticks and stones

Turned them into a tower,

Gave it to me to be my home.

 

You cemented the walls

So no one could get through;

The same way they couldn’t get through to you.

 

You lined the walls with flowers,

So my days would always be sweeter;

Now I have grown

Into the lady you’ve never known

You’ll always be the strongest-

The man without a weakness.

 

As time passed, we grew far apart

I guess I disappointed you

But you wanted me to follow my heart.

 

I can’t thank you enough

For giving me the freedom to choose

Even when the stakes are rough

You still let me loose.

 

The world continues to twirl

The stars are shining bright

And I remember the little girl

Looking up through unfamiliar eyes.

 

Even though you aren’t anywhere in sight,

Making pavements for me to walk on,

I know you’re there tonight.

 

You will forever keep me in your arms,

All the way keeping me safe from harm.

As the days go on, I watch the earth awhirl

At the same time, on replay-

Is Daddy, dancing with his little girl.

Reviews

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

One of the saddest poems I've read of yours. This is a rather personal poem for you and it expressed a lot of your inner turmoil. The element of fantasy by the little girl and the element of hope by the grown young woman was clearly in balance creating a harmonious kind of melancholic presentation.

There aren't enough words to describe this.
Surely it touched me and one of the best reaction's a writer could get is making his readers speechless. I am right now.

Thank you for sharing Rach.
-Lex

[MissWordSmith]

i agree with Punishment... those lines were truly beautiful... written like an adult yet with a child-like awe to it. this was beautiful.. it moved me. thank you for writing this piece!

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

By the way, my favorite lines in this:

You picked up sticks and stones
Turned them into a tower,
Gave it to me to be my home.

I died yet again.

[Jai]

I cried after reading this. :(

[MusicJunkie66]

This was well-expressed in how a girl feels about her dad. Great job!!

[Manda]

awww this is awesome! its so cute! very well done!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

As the father of a daughter (in the avatar with me) this touched me deeply. It's very beautiful.

[Soul Magic✯]

"You will forever keep me in your arms,
All the way keeping me safe from harm.
As the days go on, I watch the earth awhirl
At the same time, on replay-
Is Daddy, dancing with his little girl."
you flow beautifully in this piece... great tribute to your dad.