Nine Hours of Rain

This is based on the tragic flood that happened in our country just a few weeks ago.

Water, water everywhere-
I see it outside, would I care?

I see people swimming in mud,

Trying to survive with sweat and blood;

Will I help out?

I go forward, then I doubt.

Why should I sacrifice

When the government doesn't even suffice?

They see people dying

But people won't see them caring.

Instead, they party at night;

So if THEY don't care, why should I?

Water, water everywhere-

I see it outside, will I care?

If not me, who will then?

I know I can't rely on THEM.

What will happen to bright-eyed kids

Scattered all over, like seeds

Waiting to grow?

Should I be the one to plow?

Yes, it's clear. I should go

Be their so-called little hero.

I pack bags of food and clothes,

Go to submerged areas on paid-for boats.

I give people what I packed-

From their faces I knew I'd be back

To carry corpses drowned in flood

And watch the water turn to blood

I know their families' tears won't dry-

I see their hearts' never-ending cries.

I am so fortunate, I realize.

Fortunate-with everything to gain.

Just watching this tragedy from my window pane.

Water, water everywhere-

I see it outside, I SHOULD CARE.

(Because THEY don't.)

Reviews

[AbsentElements]

The rhyming helps a lot with the rhythm, which is very good I might add. Yet another amazing poem.

[Manda]

wow this was awesome! i really liked this! it has a nice flow and a nice rythem. well done!

[Abhinav]

my heart goes out to the people who lost their lives in this tragedy and those who have lost a dear one. an outstanding tribute....hats off:))
Abby

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Tragic. At least some one's doing something. :)

My favorite lines:
From their faces I knew I'd be back
To carry corpses drowned in flood
And watch the water turn to blood

Great job Rach. I'm beginning to find a uniqueness in your style of writing.