Home

I need some solitary space

To clear this useless mind-

Some new place

Nobody else can find.

 

I wanna drive so far away

That no one can reach me

In any way-

Especially not my family.

 

They need to give me some time

To be alone,

Have some peace of mind;

And maybe, find a reason to love home.

 

Home is but a place

Without difference from a house;

It is merely a space

To breed a newborn spouse.

 

It does not provide comfort,

Make you escape from trouble,

Or help you relax in any sort;

It just makes everything double!

 

If there is one place to hate

It is my so-called home.

There’s not even a piece of love on my plate

In this echoing, concrete dome.

 

Reviews

[Wake Up!]

no criticism, i liked it. at some point or another, everyone can relate to the feeling of not having a home. this was very apparent in your poem. good job(:

[AbsentElements]

It seems that sometimes home is where all the pain and the stress is, where it all starts. Sometimes family is the last thing you want to see. It would be nice to have a place away from home to be alone and find some kind of peace that you can't seem to find at home... Or among people for that matter. Very nicely put, and very nice poem.

[Daniel Gardner]

Wow, this is really good Very easy to relate to. Probably for a lot of people.

[Abhinav]

loved the rhymings, and also the words
it was an outstanding poem:)
loved it:xxx

[JenLyn]

Powerful and something I can relate to. It's a great write, I love the rhyme scheme. Keep it up! :)

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a strong write and it is shows the emotions you feel completely in this piece. I think everyone has moments like this when they feel the need to get away from all the hectic chaotic troubles of day to day life.

[Shelby Baker]

I like it
Good write & nice job

[Amy Bumpas]

I can relate to this poem because I have felt the same way.
There is a lot of emotion here..sadness, hurt.

[An owl on the moon]

What a moving write, revealing that home is not always the safe, welcoming environment we wish for. So many things can come about to send us flying out looking for peace. Powerfully written.

[deeps]

This is written very well
An enjoyable read.