Ghosts of the Past

some of their mutual friends
introduced them to each other.
little did they know,
they would end up together.
i guess what people say is true
about how opposites attract;
for in this case they do
so let me take you back-
to how it all began,
what really happened,
as they walked hand in hand
like other couples do.
just like everything else,
not everything was perfect;
there were a few obstacles
they eventually learned to neglect.
he was the silent type,
and she had friends everywhere;
but this difference couldn't stop the hype
that the both of them shared.
they went out for a while
the old fashioned way
until they walked down the aisle
and swore to God they would obey.
they used to be happy
with the future in their hands
but the evil that was money
got everything out of hand
they started to fight
A LOT, i might add-
shouting at each other
til it drove them mad.
soon even talking became
too hard for them to bear;
their life carried on the same,
but the communication just wasn't there.
she still loved him,
but he just didn't care.
she tried talking to him
but he won't even acknowledge she was there..
they continued with their life,
treating each other like ghosts-
ghosts of the past that reminds
them of how it used to be.
how do i know this, you may ask?
well, i'm a witness of their life.
how? you ask again
simply because i am their child.

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

wow... i have no words to describe this one. it was so well written, and beautifully structured... i loved the line.. so let me take you back... loved listening to the story... loved YOUR interpretation of it.. sometimes when all that children see is an unhealthy relationship, that's all they know. I am so glad that you can detach yourself from that and view the situation as a third person, yes, even if you are their child.
the ending was great, took me by surprise, but great.

[Amy Bumpas]

Oh, I really like this...the ending quite powerful.
I liked how you made this out to more like a story
than a poem. I'm sure many people can relate to
this, especially the way the economy is now.
I've always heard that money can make or break you.

[deeps]

This write is very well written and and full of feeling.
I like this alot

[Robert Fachowski]

I think I am their child too..... Which, please, don't take it weirdly. It doesn't mean we are brother and sister. Hahahaha! Well you know what I mean