dentist

Sitting in the waiting room

Waiting for my name

How I hate the dentist

This isn't some kind of game!

She walks towards me, 

Wafting that awful smell

I pretend I haven't seen her

I think I'd rather go to hell!

I sit in the chair 

He smiles and says open wide

And just as he puts his fingers inside

Snap my jaws close

I can feel his bone

Then I let go

"Get out!" he yells

With pleasure I do as I am told 

Author's Note

please don't comment about the grammar i know it is terrible and this was written with a friend in mind she knows who she is and has already had a sneek preview

Reviews

[rachylou]

I hate the dentist he pulled my tooth out D: great poem almost EPIC but I hate the dentist to much. wait he got hurt so it is EPIC WHOOOO

[Dearantlers]

I really didn't like when you used the h word, but this is so funny! I want to do that to my dentist, except hes my cousin so that wont work very well sadly. I hate going to the dentist though.

[Leslie Philibert]

Great ! Funny and true.I like poem full of real life and go-ahead tempo.Well done,I will read more.

[Rose of Gondor]

Haha! That was wonderfully hilarious and I think that just made me laugh like crazy. I think this is very, very cute. :) Your friend must hate the dentist, eh?

[Freeminded]

Hehe is the dentist really that bad??? The first paragraphs are great though I feel the second two need revising in a month/2 months time. They just don't seem to fit- and I don't know why!! Otherwise, Great read :)

[Ami N.]

Haha. This was hilarious. This is so true and hilarious as well. I love the last two lines. :) Nicely written!

[Mauricio Montoya]

Whoa!
Nice work, the write. lol

[~Dragon X]

It's not terrible at all XD I think it's cute, especially when the main character leaves "with pleasure". :D

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Hehe..good old dentist experience....
like this piece :)

[Harmonica winds]

Such a cute write here, I don't like dentist that much either. enjoyed this.