Endgame

Endgame

A Poem by Rachel Anderson
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How a place looks can change depending on who you are with. All that matters is that you're with someone you care about.

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Softened lips upon my face,
Shapely bodice covered with lace,
Withered flowers in the vase.
Despite it lacking class and grace,
Tonight, no, tonight that's not the case.
Moon hung high, a remarkable place.

Enjoying the endgame of a chase,
As our bodies intertwine in a lovers' embrace.

© 2013 Rachel Anderson


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I read this twice because I simply misread the line, "Tonight, no, tonight that's not the case." I hate when I do that!

This is a great poem! I like how you listed the opposite of the situation first. It is a device not typically used. Great poem, really enjoyed it! Keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

I'm so glad you liked it! :D



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Here's the weird thing, I like it but I don't fully understand it. The best lines to me are the first 3 lines. Then the rhymes seemed forced a little. Thanks for sharing it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. It's about two people who make love, maybe for the first time, in an old, bel.. read more
Gordon

11 Years Ago

Now it makes complete sense. I am not too bright. If you get a chance read my poem, Intertwined. .. read more
Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Okay. I'll be sure to stop by and read it soon. :)
The rhyming pattern, though simple, worked for this piece. I liked how it ended, as mentioned – simple but beautiful.

Great job!

- Aisha

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

So glad you think so, Aisha! :)
This was a well written piece Rachel. I enjoyed the read! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Wow usually I hate rhyme in such a direct and obvious manor but I really loved this, much to my surprise! Your title was superb and you portrayed real, honest affection. Nice work Rachel

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm the same way, actually, so I was surprised when I wrote this. I think I'm oka.. read more
body's should be plural and not possesive. How does Vase get pronounced?

I liked the thought to this one and the end left an imprint.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Oh, you're right. Thank you. Vase is pronounced vays. The pronunciation vahz is typically used for m.. read more
Chris

11 Years Ago

welcome
good love with hidden meanings,,,,,,,,good poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Thanks!
NITHIN PURPLE

11 Years Ago

welcome
" enjoying the end game of the chase" says so much and sums all the words up nicely , I comepletly agree that a place can look amazing with the right person or it can be terribly different

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Very sensual, lots of passion and the imagery is great. Good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Thanks!
I read this twice because I simply misread the line, "Tonight, no, tonight that's not the case." I hate when I do that!

This is a great poem! I like how you listed the opposite of the situation first. It is a device not typically used. Great poem, really enjoyed it! Keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

I'm so glad you liked it! :D
This poem was an ace
Without disgrace
it should be first place

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachel Anderson

11 Years Ago

Haha! Thanks, BR. :)

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Added on April 7, 2013
Last Updated on April 12, 2013
Tags: love, lust, lover, embrace, chase, face, lace, grace, hotel, motel, moon, night, dark, bodice, lips, soft, endgame, intertwine, body, bodies, lovers, tonight, class, classy, flowers, sex

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Rachel Anderson
Rachel Anderson

Morganton, GA



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Note: All thumbnails are my own photos unless told otherwise in the Author's note. Thank you. My name is Rachel. I'm a sophomore in college studying communication sciences and disorders. I love wri.. more..

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