On the journey

A traveler walking along the coast 

only a bit of money,

a small sack,

and a flute to keep him company 

the salty smell of the sea finds him.

Seagulls sailing above, talking to each other

the traveler continues on through the beach

he hears people talking

he looks around but sees no one,

as he travels onward he approaches a sand dune

he stops

a little whiles away he sees a village gleaming in the light,

and he knows,

he found it.

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

That sense of relief when you finally find the place (or group) you have been looking for is amazing. I really like the message conveyed through this piece. Keep up the great work! :)

[Rachel-M.]

Thank you everyone, your kind words are nice to hear, please keep reading and I'll keep writing!

[Peter Rogerson]

I found your poem as clear and detailed as a picture. Lovely.

[Dynafox]

I liked it a lot. I think it was real good at capturing an idea and a feeling such as what you'd feel as lone traveler and how you'd feel when finally reaching your destination.

[Ana]

I think you'd be a good songwriter. I was listening to music and your lyrics just seemed to match. But you're so good at poems! I don't usually read poems, but the people who write them so well are really impressive.

[hi]

i like it,it gave me visuals i could see,

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to have many journeys. I liked the story in the poem. Create strong character and hopeful ending. Thank you Rachel for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote