The Monster At Night

From the depths of the forest the beast came about,

twisting its limbs and snarling its snout.

Ripping and tearing and shredding with ease

it blazed a trail through the deep, dark trees.

The children all dreamt of this monster at night,

of it leaping from the dark to give them a fright.

And their parents all said, “don’t be silly.  It’s fine.

There’s really nothing scary about night time.”

But what they didn’t know was how the monster got in,

and how it waited outside with a pointy-toothed grin.

Then when all was quiet, and everyone asleep,

it would snatch up the children it wanted to eat.

With the greatest of ease, they’d be gone in a flash,

gobbled down fast like baked beans and mash.

Into the black night, the beast galloped away,

droplets of blood glistening on a coat of ash grey.

The only sign of its presence, the empty beds it upset,

and upon morning’s sunrise, the parent’s regret.  

Author's Note

Love to hear any feedback!! Thank you for reading!! <3

Picture came from: http://werewolf-image-gallery.blogspot.com/2011/07/werewolf-hunting-during-full-moon-in.html

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

A disturbing emotional read that takes a few times to sink in and truly understand, gorgeaus writing, amazing poem. I love this one. The rhyme scheme is fantastic and the flow is sweet. You may want to work a little on punctuation, but it's amazing as is. Well done!

[Aehr]

its a really nice piece, spookiness forges the beauty, that poem has a tale to tell... Well written

[The Analog Kid]

Nice tale with good rhyming.

[Photochick]

I liked it, nice job. Made me think of my trip to England with the baked beans and mash. The final stanza is great.

[mynameisyou]

I loved reading "The Monster at Night." Your phenomenal
storytelling ability and descriptive language keeps it fun and interesting. And thanks for the honest feedback on my poem.

[nigrum homonculus]

i loved the overall flow of this poem and how you kept things simple to make the message you are giving out a hell of a lot stronger. a really good imaginary poem!

[Jay. E. V.]

ZOMG love it;D. terrifying and whimsical at the same time, very hard to achieve! I am going to tell this story to my kids...when I get some kids...eventually lol.
For now My little cousins nightmares will have to do=D Awesome!

[Whiskurz]

This was absolutely Wonderful......You are a great story teller......Bravo my friend......Whisk