The Monster At Night

From the depths of the forest the beast came about,

twisting its limbs and snarling its snout.

Ripping and tearing and shredding with ease

it blazed a trail through the deep, dark trees.

The children all dreamt of this monster at night,

of it leaping from the dark to give them a fright.

And their parents all said, “don’t be silly.  It’s fine.

There’s really nothing scary about night time.”

But what they didn’t know was how the monster got in,

and how it waited outside with a pointy-toothed grin.

Then when all was quiet, and everyone asleep,

it would snatch up the children it wanted to eat.

With the greatest of ease, they’d be gone in a flash,

gobbled down fast like baked beans and mash.

Into the black night, the beast galloped away,

droplets of blood glistening on a coat of ash grey.

The only sign of its presence, the empty beds it upset,

and upon morning’s sunrise, the parent’s regret.  

Author's Note

Love to hear any feedback!! Thank you for reading!! <3

Picture came from: http://werewolf-image-gallery.blogspot.com/2011/07/werewolf-hunting-during-full-moon-in.html

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

A disturbing emotional read that takes a few times to sink in and truly understand, gorgeaus writing, amazing poem. I love this one. The rhyme scheme is fantastic and the flow is sweet. You may want to work a little on punctuation, but it's amazing as is. Well done!

[MoriartyMesa]

if given the chance there is a series Jim Henson did back in the day called "The Story Teller http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=49n4rZKUAQs

Your opening took me right to the opening of the show, the flow and images that you spark make me think this is something that could be told to children, on a dark and stormy night.

[Kyle]

Nice............i read it several times. I guess I liked it!

This is an original and inventive too.

[iliketowrite]

Wow scary.
I love it :)
I like the constant rhyme. It has good flow and rhythm. The story you tell is great. Love the last two lines. This is very well written.
Well done :)

[koty bell]

i agree with owl girl excellent all the same;0

[selkietales]

Ahahaha it's not really presented to be funny, I don't think, but I found it so anyway. This is great, it flows well and I like how it tells a story and is so descriptive.

[Cass]

Its a good poem, well down, and i love the rhyming.

[DeliriousCerises]

This was interesting, I got almost a cute-irony feel from it as I read. Of course that's probably because I read it to the tune of Night Before Christmas. The irony part being that it's not cute, it's quite sad and scary.

[ShadowWalker]

i really like it..... well done :)

[Lyfelucke]

Good story. Great read.