Blue eyes

Blue eyes. After his dreamy experience, those eyes seemed to have escaped the dream to reality or was it reality before and he wasn't dreaming, or was he?

An uneasy morning followed the unorthodox night. My head spun from within with numerous uncontrollable thoughts all wanting to escape, i slid off the side of the bed onto the floor throwing away the comforter as i leaned with one hand on the topside and the other on my knee. From behind the curtains sneaking in were the rays of the breaking dawn that shone somehow around my feet and as soon as my head was bent bellow the edge of the bed; in the dim light shone those blue eyes. I, quickly ran to the switches at the other end of the room, totally forgotten about the slippers i was looking for, turning the lights on to a silent peaceful and empty room! 

I sighed, unknown to all that was going to happen. Corner of my left was stringent to pain, it was shaking me down to my core as i leap back on the bed forgetting all about my previous plan to ease my bladder. 

It was no soon that i felt chill run through my body and wanted so badly the comforter i threw away, aarrgghh! getting off again, i proceeded quickly and was back on bed in a moment. It was getting chilly and chilly, no longer did even the comforter kept me warm and to no avail i left the bed.

A sudden shooting pain through the eye to my head and down to my body as i went down to the floor across the bed and below. Banging my head on the floor, i could peek under the bed with ease, in fact i was, i could see a weird set of something shiny.

NO! i realized soon, eyes: staring towards me. Just as my soul went unconscious! i no longer was aware what took place...

Author's Note

Chapter two with some effective and better changes which will lead to a better and more exciting plot! let me know what you think and i will try to be regular in uploading here on...

Reviews

[Moniba]

Bellow is actually below, and "I sighed, unknown to all that was going to happen."; unaware should be used here.
And ouch!!.. Must've hurt bad. I like this one. Gives a reader more to look forward to. Well-written.

[The dark story]

A second chapter of "the lost soul". Truly I had waited long for thus to come.
It is anice chapter yet I wanted the story to go a little more deep here.

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thanks, welll i sort of needed this to be weak so the third chapter could be much stronger!!!

[The dark story]

oh but ...ummm okay

[Muhammad Qasim]

but what ???

[The dark story]

i wanna say that i don't think that one should keep the chapters' strength weak for the sake of the next one. the interest will grow stronger if the strength is maintained .

[Muhammad Qasim]

i can't argue with you there but if i had extended this chapter then it would have given the suprise element away beforehand and the next one wouldn't have been fun!!

[The dark story]

you DONT have to argue with me. you have got your idiosyncrasy and have got mine. it was just my view.

[Muhammad Qasim]

oh okay!! makes sense!

[The dark story]

my talk always makes sense budhu:P

[Muhammad Qasim]

:PPPPPPPPPPPP

[The dark story]

o.O…kya mtlb…chida me rhi hun muu tum bana rhe ho :p

[Muhammad Qasim]

bus dekh lo :PPP

[The dark story]

Mujhe ab ek saal ho gya h tumhara budhupani dekhte dekhte :p

[Muhammad Qasim]

chalo acha hai!! aadat hogyi ho gi meri!

[The dark story]

vo to h. pr ab tumhe shayad thoda sa samjhdaar banna chaiye. dekho me "thoda" h keh rhi huun...i know bahut mushkil h tumhare liye :P

[Moniba]

Not bad, mr.Q. Keep on writing.

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thanks! :) the third one is gonna be a bomb so be ready ;)

[Moniba]

And the bomb has still not dropped.

[Muhammad Qasim]

i guess so :P its in the process!