feet tied

feet tied

A Poem by Muhammad Qasim
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revised by a friend, written by me!! see i am giving u back your credit ;P

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My feet tied down,
My heart slowly slowing…

I am miserably dying,
But I can’t stop trying.

My life suddenly gone,
All my goodness torn.

More hatred born.
I’m left lovelorn.

I am left behind,
And all the love gone.

I am dying,
But I can’t stop trying.

© 2013 Muhammad Qasim


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"I am dying,
But I can’t stop trying."...i liked these lines a lot...they are my favorite..it signifies the sheer determination you possess in spite of enduring so much...doing just what Kipling had said in his poem "If"..."and hold on when there is nothing in you...except the will which says ,"Hold on!"."...i should say the rhyming scheme is well as well and the diction are just too touching and strong in their effect...overall..it's a great ravishing write!!...keep it up!!


Posted 11 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

Thank you :) you ended up writing a longer review than the poem itself hehe anyways thanks it means .. read more
The dark story

11 Years Ago

can't help myself when i read this...sorry it got too long...and your most welcome!!
Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

no need to say sorry, i don't really mind plus it made me feel good hehe to have such a comment!! gl.. read more
Interesting stuff Qasim :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Horrible picture Qasim ;/

Posted 11 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

Thanks
What an inspiring poem... ;P

Posted 11 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

haha!!! they aren't that good u know ;P
Moniba

11 Years Ago

awww :( chalo... phr puri poem nhi achi.
Muhammad Qasim

11 Years Ago

haha!! chalo if u say so maan leta hun ;P

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Added on April 23, 2013
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Muhammad Qasim
Muhammad Qasim

London, United Kingdom



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