Once upon a time

My happy days seems to be coming to an end!!

Once upon a time

I was in front of the winning line

I was in a radiant shine

I had the best host

I was all lost

It was my amazing past

It never did last

Like under a magic cast

Just a few many small days

More intimidating than many monthly pays

Only if..it would have made a long stay

It could have made my day

But in the end though

All i had was "more..Oh no"

Very gently

That moved me mentally

Reviews

[The dark story]

Like Kipling said…victory and defeat are two imposters of life…they are mere illusions for few minutes and that is why one should not affect themselves with their influence but rather move on passing just a glance at them…
Because we have to move on in our life…there is so much more to it…but it is the human nature which compells us to drown in despair and says…"no euphoria in my life is left now" !!
I like the theme of your poem and that third last line the most…i though I would wish you would have ended it in a more strong way…but anyway…the rest is awesome!!!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago

[Androglossia]

What is life without winning? And what is life without losing? Those are the key essentials of becoming a better person. A better person who can accept the passing of time with grace and without regret, without 'Oh nos':) A thoughful write with a youthful glow.

[Muhammad Qasim]

thank you... :)

[Androglossia]

You're very welcome!

[Muhammad Qasim]

it means A lot :)

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

A nice poem the theme is strong, at the end poem ends with a weakness... Was hoping for some thing strong at the end

[Muhammad Qasim]

i have been told about that before and it's under process about what to do!! :) and thank you foe the review

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

ohk :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)