soundless sand

just random thoughts.

Little do i worth
On this wonderful earth

From birth
I am all dirt

I am seen through
I never get any clue

I am stuck with glue
On this wonderful earth
All i see is blue
From birth

i always tried
till i got dried

in the worsening end

I made an echo
In this soundless sand
Not from birth
But before death

They say it's life
Same as knife

unfair yet fair.

Reviews

[The dark story]

The last stanza was really thought provoking…unveiling the truth of life in so few words…truly nice!!!

Posted 1 Month Ago

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, this really struck me with all it's greatness good going there, Mr. Qasim
100/100

[Muhammad Qasim]

thanks.. hehe

[Rhianne Ney]

;D

[Muhammad Qasim]

;)

[InsanityWriter]

Lovely. :) Great write!! ^_^

[Muhammad Qasim]

It means a lot! Thank you :)

[dunnia]

very nice....i feel lke its been so long XD

[Muhammad Qasim]

thanks...you feel like it...i know its been toooooooooooooo long xD

[dunnia]

Hahaha well dnt worry todays my first day of my two week break....my midterms were so exausting

[Muhammad Qasim]

atleast something good to hear :) i have my mocks in march and its going to be a tough few weeks starting monday or soo!! n how did ur mid terms goo ??

[dunnia]

Oh thats sucks march is your birthday and i did good except in physics i think i failed but so did most of my friends so im good ;p

[Muhammad Qasim]

i am really good in physics plus i really like it.. hehe.. need any tutions..i m here :p
yea i know...my bday n urZ as well :'(

[Moniba]

That's not bad, Qasim ;P
Thori correction krdun?

[Muhammad Qasim]

same goes for you..Moniba ;p
krdo...waisa konsi ?

[Moniba]

Should be little 'am' I worth.
And never get 'a' clue flows better with the weight of your lines.

[Muhammad Qasim]

i'll correct the second part but in the first one...i am telling and not asking so little do i worth goes better then am i worth where ill be asking a question

[Moniba]

aise tou do se bhi question ka look araha hae. But what i'm saying is k the usage of do with worth is wrong. Just sayin'.

[Muhammad Qasim]

chalo aik tumhari maan leta hun aur aik apni :)

[Moniba]

Arite :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

okay!!

[Anita Harris]

Very nice! I like your use of words in this. Great job!

[Muhammad Qasim]

thank you :)

[SarahV]

This is a really great poem! I like this "I made an echo In this soundless sand" very poetic. Keep up the good work!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thanks :)

[Lino Rie]

It has a remarkable use of words and well write. Great jod. ^-^

[Muhammad Qasim]

Oh thank you. :D

[David Scott]

This feels far more directed than a random thought. A knife that cuts two ways. A life that was predestined to matter yet feels meaningless in the scope of this reality.
A thought worth exploring.
Good job.

[Muhammad Qasim]

i did explore until it felt good enough to publish and Thank you! for the wonderful review :)