smile! : (

inspired by the writing of a friend!

A hint of sadness

Behind that .. Smile

That smile

With those desperate eyes

That smile

Keeping those tears at bay

It was a smile

But only a smile

With emptiness behind

That smile

Had more heat

Than the sun

That smile

Longer than a mile

But empty 

It was

That smile

With nothing behind

But sadness

Yet that smile

Kept on smiling!! : ))

Reviews

[smilempsn]

'Yet that smile
Kept on smiling!!'

:) :) Nice words ....

[Muhammad Qasim]

yup :D < see

[smilempsn]

:)

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)

[Rhianne Ney]

Good use of the word, "that smile" and I hope the one characterized here will surely keep on smiling~!

[Muhammad Qasim]

he will.. :)

[Rhianne Ney]

;D

[Muhammad Qasim]

thanks too you a little ;)

[Rhianne Ney]

@0@

[Muhammad Qasim]

haha

[Lina Grey]

Sometimes, that's all it takes :) a gorgeous write, very profound. Just keep swimming, as Dory :D would say, no matter what. love this :) ~em

[Muhammad Qasim]

don't no who dory is but thank you :D

[Lina Grey]

from Finding Nemo? sorry, I kinda assume that because it's my favorite movie evryone's seen it... you're welcome :)

[Lina Grey]

~em XP

[Muhammad Qasim]

oooh haha...i have seen the movie..being the movie lover i am but it was way in the past when it was first released...so fingers crossed when it comes to remembering names!!

[Lina Grey]

ahh okay. I get that way too :) well, then i still have yet to meet a person who hasn't seen the movie :D

[Muhammad Qasim]

i am pretty sure i know many who hasn't seen it...sucks being the only movie lover in the group (in my class)

[Lina Grey]

D8 i'm so sorry for you... ~em

[Muhammad Qasim]

its alrite....i am used to it :D so really doesnt matter

[Lina Grey]

well that's good. Movies are my favorite hobby, so you can always talk to me about them if you want to :D

[Muhammad Qasim]

finally...someone like mee :) hmm so other than finding nemo which movie do u like... i really liked "the odd life of timothy green" awesome movie and also "lifr of pi"

[Muhammad Qasim]

"life of pi"*

[Lina Grey]

I love the Odd Life of Timothy Green!! I haven't seen Life of Pi yet :C but i will soon! I really really liked Prometheus, and I'm a sucker for all the animated movies like Brave and Hotel Transylvania.

[Muhammad Qasim]

yea...odd life of timothy is actually superb and life of pi is slow at starting but rocks midwhile prometheous is also good...u shud see aliens...the parrdirected by james cameron...its old but epic and i like animated as well and hotel transylvania is way better than brave!! hehe see i have seen all of these movies

[Lina Grey]

yes it definitely is (hotel transylvania to brave)!! I'll have to look up aliens...do you like horror movies? I love Stephen King movies. Have you seen In the Mouth of Madness?

[Muhammad Qasim]

i like any sort of movies as long as they have a good story line...n nope...haven't seen it but now i will...ill let u know my views on the movie :)

[Lina Grey]

lol I haven't seen it yet either! I read some pretty mixed reviews on it, and I want to see it... i think it's pretty old though because I haven't been able to find it in movie stores yet :P

[Muhammad Qasim]

oh..haha..if i find it..ill be sure to let u know! :)

[Lina Grey]

I'll do the same :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)

[LouisianaBird]

I love the idea behind this poem, and you had some promising lines. My favorite being,

"That smile
Had more heat
Than the sun"
When you wrote this, you were really saying something. The smile has anger behind it, and defied all science behind an actual smile. You should have played more off of that for sure!
Nice write (:

[Muhammad Qasim]

i am glad you found something great in this peace :) ..... and i tried to keep the length short cuz one thing i have seen is.....you open a poem .. see the length ...then read sooo
n Thank you for the review :D

[LouisianaBird]

Hahaha! This is true for some people, but you shouldn't let that limit you!

[Muhammad Qasim]

hmmmm....i don't agree much with others but i will here...u have a point : )

[ms. barrie]

very profound, written with simplistic eloquence that flows, heart-felt poem most can relate to. thanks for sharing and your kind review on "sshh" - keep writing :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you and it was my pleasure to be able to review such a marvelous penned poem!!
Take care
Qasim

[ms. barrie]

thank you, you are far too sweet, for i don't even like that poem "sshh" or prose, it was just something i was writing on my f.b. status three months ago, never thought it was anything special, just thought i'd share it on here, i almost hid it, in fact. Namaste!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Doesnt matter where it was written .. you wrote it and it was good

[ms. barrie]

thank you, and this poem was wonderful, very enjoyable read!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you .. and so was yours

[InsanityWriter]

I know how this feels. Wonderful description. ^_^

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you : )

[Hamza]

smile :)
wonderful interpretation on how people wear it ..

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you ..

[Daniel Eckert]

Yes, oh yes. I love it. Very well done!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you!! : )

[RachelReaper]

this was very vivid based off of only one memory, very nice job

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you .. And no aliens here .. hehe

[RachelReaper]

lol

[The dark story]

it's easy for few people to keep up that fake smile.and i think that it's a sign of their bravery.to even smile in that difficult situation..so what if it's fake.......there so many things that are fake in this world!!!!!
i like the desperate feel of the poem and the way you penned it is really very appreciable........the message is so pure
thanks for sharing it with us:)

[Muhammad Qasim]

But all those fake things hurt you for not being able to share .. And thank you!!

[The dark story]

yeah right!!!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hmm acha!!