Unspoken words

just an experience of my past!!

She wanted to know
Those few unspoken words

I would not say
I did not dare
Cause i could not bear
Another of that fake layer
That she had on

She uttered
I muttered
A lot of useless words

those few unspoken words
In our minds

Only we knew
Those few unspoken words
Were all true

But never we dare
Those few unspoken words 
To share

For we knew
Those few unspoken words
Were all true

As we We kept on the lies
To keep those few unspoken words
To die
Without any bye

We halt
To talk

As the chats
Dropped

Reviews

[Moniba]

I can relate to this. It's like you're narrating recent events of my life here...

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a unique and well weaved poem~! And it's really fun to read this !!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

haha!! thanks you... means a lot!

[Rhianne Ney]

;D

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)

[Marnie Jones]

Your use of infinitive verbs is very unique :) This, to me, is an excellent reiteration of how, in any relationship, the truth can get so ugly that instead of letting it out, it's better to fall slowly out of the relationship and retain those words. Could it be that there is a fear to let those criticisms out, because you know the other person will retaliate with their own "unspoken truth"? Very interesting. Only a few people know us well enough that they can actually, legitimately formulate solid complaints on our character... I loved how you ended this; the last two lines were very impactful :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

yeS .. when the truth gets ugly all we do is hide it .. typical human nature and i can totally agree that their is fear also the idea of retaliation of the other person scares u but that at all depends on different people with different personalities and view points and thank you : )

[RachelReaper]

I think this is my favorite poem by you, you really did a great job with this one

[Muhammad Qasim]

thank you .. glad you like it : )

[RachelReaper]

I did :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe .. even better to know : )

[WingsToFly]

It's a nice poem, nice flow. :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you! : )

[Jo March]

'Cuz i could not bare'

Cause* and I think you mean 'bear'

Nice poem, otherwise.

[Muhammad Qasim]

I used slang there on purpose but thank you .. I will make the correction!!

[The dark story]

"As we We kept on the lies
To keep those few unspoken words
To die
Without any bye".that was just mind blowing and so awesome.i liked a lot.and the title too..it's actually true that only those people can understand what's there in pour mind who understand us so deeply....the way you penned it is really very appreciable.nice work!!!!!!!.

[Muhammad Qasim]

yes.. a very few people .. not even few just about one or two people know us that close to know whats on our minds and thank you!

[The dark story]

you're welcome .and i believe there's no one in my life(not even my mom and dad.they are the one i love the most) that could ever understand what's there in my weird mind!!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Yes .. a very very few!!

[The dark story]

except a telepathic :P

[Muhammad Qasim]

An exception .. Hehe

[The dark story]

you'll always find exception in this world.it hides so many secrets and surprises for us

[Muhammad Qasim]

Yes .. Different and that is the only reason this world is fun!! Cause a world with all the similar world would seriously be boring!!

[The dark story]

oh.you sounds like you enjoy your life a lot.that's good !111

[Muhammad Qasim]

You cant be sad for the world .. its too big so just sit back get set and enjoy .. tenxion lena ka nhi dena ka

[The dark story]

hahahahahaa.(you're making me laugh when i actually don't want to).......but that's not what i feels...i know you're right..but still.i want to leave this world as soon as possible.

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hehehehehe ... laughing is healthy and suitd people toh we should always keep on laughing .. hmmmm .. that thinking is not right .. i heard this saying once .. when you come in this world its not your fault if u are not rich or famous but if u die that way then it is your fault .. same way why do you want to leave this world when you should stay by and fight and make the world an ideal place for every being here

[Muhammad Qasim]

I totally spoke like a philosopher or something!! hehe

[The dark story]

hahahahahahahahaa........oh yeah you did.Mr. Philosopher..but i now.i don't want to fight anymore...i've already played with my weapons a lot.and it's easy for you to say so......if you were in my place/you would have agreed with me!!!!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hehe .. thank you but giving up is not the answer .. you need to stand your ground .. weapons or no weapons .. but sometimes running away doesnt mean you lose .. its just living to fight another day .. But i am not in your place and i do not know your situation so can't say anything!! unless you give me something to go on

[Hamza]

The unspoken words are the ones that keep us on the edge ...
A hit and our joy knows no bounds; but a miss, and we're shattered like splinters off a shell...
Mesmerizing write :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you but those words often are so harsh or the truth is so terrible that saying it means you are in for a complete fight!! so you have to keep them to yourselves for the better!!

[Hamza]

can be either ways ...
you're right ..

[Muhammad Qasim]

Yaa .. it can be either ways but always hope for the best

[AnoudQ]

Great poem and a little bit sad oh it's so emotional good write !

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you!! : )

[AnoudQ]

welcome

[Muhammad Qasim]

: )

[AnoudQ]

Please read my stuff and review on some of it I'll be glad if you do !

[Muhammad Qasim]

Ok .. i will .. no problem!! : )

[Chesney W.]

awwww.......emotional, simple with words....an excellent piece.
-Chesney Chey(:

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you : )

[Chesney W.]

you're welcome(:

[Muhammad Qasim]

no problem!