The frozen FIRE
A Poem by Muhammad Qasim
 Our past's has a lot of affect on our lives!! 
The fire that froze for eternity yet burns radiant brighter than the sun Shinier than the ocean Flickering through my eyes Imprinting upon them That cold fire Fills my past With those dreams That never became reality The sun A constant reminder The moon With a monotonous gaze The stars All spies Spying Upon me In my darkest moments For they are All but my imagination!!
© 2012 Muhammad Qasim
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Love this :
"The sun
A constant reminder
The moon
With a monotonous gaze
The stars
All spies"
Esp the last 2 lines.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Hmmmm .. I am glas that you are in love with my lines ..
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Nice... I like the way you write, using short sentences to give a clear picture..
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you so much for that wonderful yet beautiful heart melting yet warming compliment!! : )
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12 Years Ago
Seriously man... it's just a simple, short compliment!
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12 Years Ago
i just thanked you for that wonderful yet beautiful heart melting yet warming compliment!! and you a.. read morei just thanked you for that wonderful yet beautiful heart melting yet warming compliment!! and you are saying it was short .. words have alot of power .. ; )
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12 Years Ago
Yes indeed. : )
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you know what's the best part of your work?..it;s the awesome titles.really arouse a great curiosity in me to know what lies in their.......the poem is just so nice.the vivid imagery..they just blew me away..and that's true that we learn a lot from our past and build our future.nice work!!!!
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Our past is a failure of expieriences from which we should acquire all the good points and use them .. read moreOur past is a failure of expieriences from which we should acquire all the good points and use them in our life .. We .. being humans are bound to make mistakes but only thosr who learn from their mistakes and dont repeat them in the future .. will be the onez to arise again like a phoenix!! And thank you for that wonderful review!! : )
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12 Years Ago
oh wonderful.that phoenix line.um.i think i'll be a kind of failure.i always read questions wrong in.. read moreoh wonderful.that phoenix line.um.i think i'll be a kind of failure.i always read questions wrong in my maths test.i always make a resolution that next time it will not happen.but sadly.i commit the same mistake(inspite of my precautions).i think i could never ever correct this mistake
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12 Years Ago
your mistakes are there to make you a better person and it doesn't have to be today that you correct.. read moreyour mistakes are there to make you a better person and it doesn't have to be today that you correct your mistakes .. it can be any day in the entirety of your life .. you have learned your mistake .. as much as i can guess .. most likely in a little while .. you will not make the same mistakes!! for a strong dedication is all you need! the rest .. tha Almighty will help you!!
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12 Years Ago
i really don't want to make that mistake in my Board exams....i revise my work thirty times still i .. read morei really don't want to make that mistake in my Board exams....i revise my work thirty times still i don't know from where that stupid question comes flying to tell me that i have read it wrong:( :(....but i really hopes that it would go away soon!!
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12 Years Ago
i know you won't .. umm .. well keep up the practice and you will get it so dont worry!! : )
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I just flicked on this as it was at the top of the live feed, I really like it, maybe personal as I have recently played with ideas on reality and imagination, or fantasy. The words are haunting at the end, brilliant
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
you are welcome
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i agree with reaper this is gonna make me paranoid thanks -_- ...........im just kidding its really nice liked it
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Hmm .. thank you for not being paranoid i guess
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now Im going to be paranoid whenever I see the night sky... haha, but this was very nice. I liked how you personified the sun, moon, and stars.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Not for being paranoid .. for the review!! :D
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12 Years Ago
hehe .. That's good
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12 Years Ago
but I'm not really paranoid, i think the night sky is pretty
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12 Years Ago
yaa .. the sky's a total beauty .. you can keep gazing for hour's and that without noticing .. so hu.. read moreyaa .. the sky's a total beauty .. you can keep gazing for hour's and that without noticing .. so huge .. it make's you wonder how small you are in the universe!
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12 Years Ago
I try not to think about how small I am in the universe. It makes things seem kind of insignificant,.. read moreI try not to think about how small I am in the universe. It makes things seem kind of insignificant, don't you think?
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12 Years Ago
it does so make us look insignificant but wondering and believing are totally different .. don't you.. read moreit does so make us look insignificant but wondering and believing are totally different .. don't you wanna know if there is some alien's out there .. more planet;s with life .. being small or unimportant doesn't matter cuz it's all about your action's that matter the most!
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12 Years Ago
that's very true, but about the aliens... no. I don't want their to be aliens. What if the movies ar.. read morethat's very true, but about the aliens... no. I don't want their to be aliens. What if the movies are true and they just want to take over our planet? That wouldn't be fun.
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12 Years Ago
well .. i dont think so cuz if there really are alien's out there who would want to take over our pl.. read morewell .. i dont think so cuz if there really are alien's out there who would want to take over our planet .. we woudn't be sitting here chatting!! in my hypothesis they are most likely watching us and waiting for the right time .. when we are evolved and unlike movies would greet them and not put them in jail's ,or laboratories to operate on them!
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12 Years Ago
They would show up!"
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12 Years Ago
I wouldn't try to operate on them, I'd try to exterminate them.
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12 Years Ago
This is just what i am talking about .. Is killing all we know .. cannot we make a truce with them ... read moreThis is just what i am talking about .. Is killing all we know .. cannot we make a truce with them .. learn from them if they happen to be a greater nation then ours .. live peacefully .. we are not yet ready or evolved enough for contact!!
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12 Years Ago
and thank god we're not. I don't want them here
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12 Years Ago
Xactly .. this thinking of being scared from the unknown .. we as the whole human kind are not yet r.. read moreXactly .. this thinking of being scared from the unknown .. we as the whole human kind are not yet ready to recieve them because we are not ready to the possibilities of what may and may not happen .. who know's .. some alien's somewhere might just be reading this post and laughing at our stupidity
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12 Years Ago
...really? Then... SCREW YOU, ALIENS! AND YOUR HEADS LOOK FUNNY!
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12 Years Ago
hehe .. if you see some light outside the window .. know he is there to bad mouth you as rrevenge!
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12 Years Ago
the alien can put it in their juice box and suck it
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12 Years Ago
haha .. i suppose if he would have been reading this .. alien i mean .. i think by now he would have.. read morehaha .. i suppose if he would have been reading this .. alien i mean .. i think by now he would have given up and changed the page!!
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12 Years Ago
that's true...
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12 Years Ago
hehe .. yup!
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Added on November 2, 2012
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Tags: Imagination, Past, Fire
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