Death!

Death .. People die

Death is here

Just there

Try to see

With your condemned eyes

Around that edge

Behind that corner

Hidden in the darkness

Gaze there

No behind you

Hide

It found you

Noooo .. Run

It caught you

It came at the leg

You felt it

That shuddering shout inside

The thighs 

Crying .. Noo .. Not yet

Felling to the ground

The now numb chest

Giving in

The hands

Failing

As an epic thought 

Of complete darkness

Cover's your eye's

Its the last you see

Until the pain goes

That blade

Reaped thy soul seperate

"You are now freed,

To be placed in hell"

Echoes in your bodyless soul!

Reviews

[The dark story]

oh mine.that was.......umm...so dark.and i mean you actually created that dark eerie atmosphere .i mean i could actually feel that desperate feel like something eerie is after you.it's true.that no matter.death is the last destination of every man's life!!!!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

To acquire a peaceful death is the only reason we people live ao desperately in yhis world ..

[Lunette Lariz]

This is wonderfully creepy. Nice one.

[Muhammad Qasim]

Oh Thank you!!

[Lunette Lariz]

My pleasure. :)

[RachelReaper]

very chilling, indeed. It just goes to show that Death is out for everyone and hardly anyone evades his vice grip. Good work!

[Muhammad Qasim]

Thank you .. : )

[RachelReaper]

your welcome :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

: )

[dunnia]

spooky...............now im getting scared im home alone >.

[Muhammad Qasim]

haha .. dont be .. there is always a higher authority watching over us! : )

[dunnia]

lol your write but you cant help it at times you no us girls

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe .. well if it wouldn't have been able to scare someone then i guess there would have been no point in writing

[dunnia]

haha your write its important that your work has an affect on the reader.....and youve done that perfectly.....my music is on very loud...makes me feel like im not alone

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe .. good good .. ya if not then there's no point ot the writings!! sometimes even in those beautiful lyrical melodies there are tunes that get inside your head and boom ..

[dunnia]

yea your right :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe .. i know .. Trust me! : )

[dunnia]

haha your too confident....but im sure you are

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe ..i have expierience!! : )

[dunnia]

hmmmmmm last i checked your younger then me.............hehe i have more experience

[Muhammad Qasim]

That is true but being older doesn't mean they have more experience .. at time's the young surprise you :D

[dunnia]

sure thats what the young say to the old...haha we old people have surprises of our own :) might be more shocking then yours

[Muhammad Qasim]

hmm .. we say that but we also have enough to back them up .. plus unless you are calling yourself some old geezer lady .. you are just a year older than me .. and i love suprises

[dunnia]

haha a year makes a difference i mean think about it ive been livin 365 days more then you have give or take a few days and you no old people always win arguments so might as well just hand this to me maybe next time you can win kiddo XD

[Muhammad Qasim]

Well actually the one with either a high voice and stamina to talk really fast or the one with very good point's win ..
Ahem Ahem .. now i am gonna see this to the end .. aunty

[dunnia]

well well i see you have challenged me..................................CHALLENGE EXCEPTED!!!!! my little child hehehe
but ill be nice enough to give you one last opportunity to not embarrass yourself since im feeling very kind today

[Muhammad Qasim]

I don't take my word's back .. same goes for you .. i am in a good mood so last chance .. if you want to run away .. now's your chance :D .. aunty

[Muhammad Qasim]

by the way .. what are we fighting for and on what topic ? -_-

[dunnia]

hell no i guess were both stuck until YOU give up or lose of course.....btw do you remember why were fighting....you know us old people time steals your memory

[dunnia]

thats funny you young people are no different then us old people

[Muhammad Qasim]

my memory sucks .. i have no idea ..

[dunnia]

oh well lets just say i won this one and get on with our lives :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

oh well .. i'll let you win .. you owe me now :D .. since i also dont like to defeat girls ;-)

[dunnia]

awww thank you.....hmmmm maybe next time kiddo ill buy you icecream or something :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

No thank you .. you can eat it alone .. old geezer!

[dunnia]

you no what i will eat it alone and dont say i never offered......problem is i dont have icecream and now im hungry :(

[Muhammad Qasim]

ooh .. then let's go and eat together : ) .. i am offering now : D

[dunnia]

awesommeee now were do we meet up... your country or mine and since your offering you should pay up for the tickets ;p

[Muhammad Qasim]

ahemm ahemm .. i think i am just gonna mail the ice cream to you :D

[dunnia]

i knew you were gonna say that haha oh well its the thought that counts hmmmmmm but i mean are u trying to kill me with your icecream thats gonna be expired by the time it reaches me...i dont think so i want fresh icecream

[Muhammad Qasim]

oh then just come here n i'll arrange the fresh ice creams .. ryt out the freezer's or the oven's or whichever machine;s they are built in :D

[dunnia]

correct me if im wrong but i think its a freezer im kidding dont correct me just agree and acknowledge my awesomeness hehehe

[Muhammad Qasim]

they dont come pre made .. they are most likely made in some sorta machine's and then placed in freezer's1

[dunnia]

i said to just agree my words were clear....but i guess your..... a little right and im just a little more right then you just dont be jealous

[Muhammad Qasim]

Who'd be jealous over some one telling that ice ecream's come from machine's or freezer's just as that question .. did the hen came first or an egg!! lol

[dunnia]

well if you ask me i know the chicken came first cuz i said so and sorry for mysteriously disappearing internet suckssss

[Muhammad Qasim]

Its ok .. i had some trouble aswell .. the site wasnt connecting for some reason ..

[Muhammad Qasim]

Its ok .. i had some trouble aswell .. the site wasnt connecting for some reason ..

[Muhammad Qasim]

N also .. i am going to sleep so bye .. take care!

[dunnia]

same here...so annoying i was really close to breaking my laptop...just kidding i love my lappy and nothing not even you can get between us haha

[dunnia]

same here its like 2 in like ten minutes goodnight

[Muhammad Qasim]

U seriously have a lot of nack for being over confident .. I did turn my lap of n now i am on cell phone : )

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hehe .. lucky .. it 4 am here!!

[dunnia]

hahaha go to sleep its very important for little kids health....im out nice talkin to you ^_^

[Muhammad Qasim]

I just planned to ditch you and sleep .. I am not gonna reply anymore :p

[Muhammad Qasim]

Take care .. sleep well .. etc

[dunnia]

you too......................etc

[Muhammad Qasim]

: )

[Muhammad Qasim]

I am gone now!!

[dunnia]

when r u gonna finally sleep...i worry about you kiddo

[Muhammad Qasim]

I ditched u n slept peacefully

[dunnia]

i just woke up and i left to and last i checked u were online then i logged off.....i couldnt here my alarm this morning i was so sleepy *.*

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hmm .. pretty much same for me but i didnt had any rezon to wake early : )

[dunnia]

i had to feed my kitty.....he wouldnt shut up by the way morning ^_^

[Muhammad Qasim]

Hmm .. same to you