I Heard There Was a Castle

I heard there was a castle by a faraway sea,

That stood untouched by time or space,

(Or anything else man has dreamt up).

And when you stood within those swelling walls,

There was no force, no evil,

That could ever hope to lay its claws on you and rend you from yourself.

That castle fell through, and its stones are now ash or ruble beneath a trembling ocean.

Its particles floating through water and air,

To make it back to you, fly down your throat or land in your ham sandwich.

And we walk about, imagining it in our quivering hearts,

Its walls ever about our flinching frightened ears,

Until the cannons roar with glorious thunder and our pale eyes close.

 

Reviews

[afra]

wow ..amazing ...keep it up

[CHRIS ANDES]

your words helped me to see the castle
thanks
its wonderful
=]

[nigrum homonculus]

hmmm. a poem about a fantasy being destroyed in a sense by reality...i like that. interesting subject well done. you're wordplay was on point as usual

[Pencrafter]

Although colorful and imaginative, it's still puzzling. If you only heard of the castle, which ended up being destroyed, then how does it get dust on everything? I like the allusion of conjuring a mental safe place, which in reality offers no true protection. The insertion of the 'ham sandwich' tends to negate the fantasy feel. It sounds like a dream, and dreams can be anything. So that's ok.

[MOON]

Lovely flowing write.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I like it! Reminds me of like atlantis or heaven or something. Cool and interesting. Good job

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I like the story here. good poem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Would be nice to have a place where there was no force and no evil. I like the story in the poem and the realistic ending. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote