"Maid with the flaxen hair"

A poem based on the music created by Claude Debussy with the same title....

                                            Fair maiden

                                            You toil for some one else's desires

                                             And sing for the joy of others

                                             You give them peace as you

                                              Brush your flaxen hair in the pantry closet

                                              The children get lost in your kindness

                                              As your kind is looked down upon  

                                              Is it not unfair

                                              That a love like yours

                                              Is left unattended?

                                              If only I, Claude Debussy,

                                              Could sweep you away with my music

                                              Then, perhaps, my maid with the flaxen hair

                                              could be free and walk with me

                                              along the country road

                                              and we could plant lilies

                                              along the shore

                                              and place a rose in your flaxen hair

                                              and hold each other

                                              for eternity.      

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Such a courting poem bristling with the love and desire to love a maiden in ways no one else has, a maiden often manipulated for her altruism and treated poorly in contrast to how she treated, and still treats, the world now. I always enjoy the peaceful and gentle atmosphere that your poems invoke, and this one is no exception. Well done.

[paul sal.....]

thank you,tai....................

[Dee]

awwwwww, I like the sweetness and the understanding of this woman that i hear from your words.

such a love this deep is rare and so fragile.

Paul ,you should have been born in the medieval times to woo this fair maiden yourself.....

[Linda alexander]

Bravo, fantastic writing, excellent thinking pattern, am amazed my friend, enjoyed every single word

[A. Amos]

Simply splendid, enjoyed the read and thanks for sharing

[melissa]

Another awesome poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[paul sal.....]

thank you, melissa but I am not much of a story teller................

[melissa]

You're welcome

[Cerise]

Wooow..a very wonderfully written poem....I like the ending..its very sweet and touching...well done

[paul sal.....]

thank you, fancy, nice bench.................