The day we stopped looking, Charlie

A peek of the woman he loves through his eyes.

Mountain of curls, dark as the night, soft as the clouds
Caressed continuously, can't blame your finger tips
Damn that neck! Snuggling under it, mocks me for being so lucky
A simple swing of the clock, ticktock, for a useless subconscious study
Just can't unnotice every small detail, diagnosed me as crazy
As Colonel Frank Slade says " We are dead, the day we stopped looking, Charlie."

Intimidating the glow of Apollo, outshines the Lunar Goddess
Dare to stare straight into those eyes anticipate the death of confidence

Its a safe bet against those Playboys trying to coax you, Princess of their fairy tale
Some dreaming of you walking down the aisle
Messing up their pick up lines in the desperate efforts to be the alpha male
There is nothing more attractive than a woman who knows she is beautiful

Reviews

[G8S24TUNES]

Good poem. I like the metaphors in the opening lines.

[Pushya Mithra]

Thanks a lot! Please go ahead and read the other two poems of mine and let me know what you think. Looking for feedback! :)

[Ookpik]

Wonderful poem! With a very interesting concept 👍 Some really magical images in beginning, captures those beautiful moments one finds themselves in when lost in the throes of love.

I also really like the concept you threw into the second and last stanzas.

The battle of insecurity to find sincerity : D

Fantastic Job 👍

[Pushya Mithra]

Thanks a lot Aaron! First and the last line of the first stanza are inspired by the movie "Scent of a Woman". If you haven't seen it, watch it!
You read it right. Every guy is insecure when it comes to the girl he likes coz he always thinks that she is out of his league. Noticing every small detail of her drove him crazy to get himself tested(a subconscious study) which revealed nothing but the fact that he is just crazy about her.

[Ookpik]

Hah! I love it!