reporter

Me and Anna stayed up all night watching thriller movies and crime movies. We even watched CSI all day. We tried to get as much in crime scenes and finding a killer as much as we could. I couldn't sleep at all though because I was freaked out. Anna fell asleep though because she could just scare them away. When we woke up, by woke up I mean Anna, I told her,"We should go to where you were killed first."

"Ican't go there. I get these terrible visions when I do. From the night I was murdered, plus it gives me the creeps. Well maybe you should stay at Jake's house. Ya'll can go to the library." She nodded then we walked into the kitchen. My mom was fixing eggs and bacon along with panacakes. We sat down and my mmom passed us some plates. I got me and Anna a glass of orange juice then sat down and started eating. "So girls, where are we going today?"

"Well I was hoping to go where Anna was killed and look around. Anna is going to the library with Jake."

"Jake, who's Jake?"

"Hu. Hm, Becca's uh, boyfriend hmm. Gosh something was really stuck in my throat!" I eyed Anna with suspenceful eyes. She just smiled back at me. "So why isn't Anna going with us?" I was happy my dad got off the subject of Jake.

"She said that she gets these visions of when she did get killed. Oh and she get's the creeps."

"Well let's hope we don't get the creeps." He smiled and took a sip of his coffee. Just then the doorbell rang. Anna hid behind the corner and waited to see who it was. When my dad opened the door there was a girl, about my mom's height. She wore a bright orange jacket that if you stared at for to long you could accually go blind. She wore matching pants along with them and held a small notepad with a very high tech camera. "Oh hello, are you James Corral? I'm Carol Lang. I'm a reporter for the Richmond times Dispatch. I wanted to do a story on how they got you mixed up and how your family reacted and stuff."

"Oh yeah," He turned to look at my mom and she nodded her head,"Sure come on in."

I walked over to Anna and said, "Just stay invisable and you'll be okay." she nodded looking a little worried. I walked into the kitchen with everybody else. "Yes, but first can I get some pictures then I will ask some questions." We all nodded and let her walk around. I turned to my dad and grasped his arm,"What's wrong Becs?" he always called me that when I was little. "What if the camera is able to bring up a picture of Anna?" I was looking at him with a concerned looked. "Oh, I never thought of that. Don't worry I'm sure Anna has ditched so that won't happen." He smiled making me feel a little better, but I was still worried. After shehad taken some pictures she sat down and took out her note pad.

(*)

After she had the interview and asked us all questions, even me, she stood up said,"Thank you. I hope you have a good day." and left. We waited until she walked down the curb and said," Okay Anna, you can come out now." She came out of my room with my laptop in her hand. She closed it and put it on the couch. "Okay i'll walk her to Jake's house then me and dad will get ready to go to the scene of the crime!" I tried to sound like the inspector I saw in an old movie last night. "What will I do?" my mom asked. "You can go to the library with Anna I guess."

"Okay so I can meet Jake?" she smiled at me and pulled on her purse and walked out the door. I looked at Anna then walked out the door with them. "Get some things ready like a camera and notepad paper adn put my laptop in my case too!" I yelled while walking out the door. "Ah, good to be home again."

Reviews

[Havatara]

One thing I noticed is that earlier you said that Anna doesn't sleep, but she ended up falling asleep here. I think you did that last chapter or a couple of chapters ago, too. Also, maybe you should put a line between the chapters, since it's not indented. It makes it easier to read. Other than that it's a great story and I'm loving it.

[A.Lee]

This is good. The only thing I would say is that when the reporter came and said "I'm Carol Lang. I'm a reporter for the Richmond times Dispatch. I wanted to do a story on how they got you mixed up and how your family reacted and stuff." I would take out the words "and stuff". It sounds a little more professional. Nice job so far.