She

Something i was feeling i guess

The cold air sends shivers down her spine.
She shall freeze tonight.
She no longer feels she belongs here on this earth.
for she was a disgrace to her self and family.
People would object though and force her to stay.
Making up lies, saying she's a great friend, she's beautiful.
She doesn't think any of that is true, For she never keeps her promises anymore.
She's broken every rule in her book, ruin every ambition she's ever had, and last of all, least of all, She's ruined the boy she thought she'd see a future with..

Reviews

[Gone]

I have been in a similar place. maybe I'll write about it someday. This is very well expressed.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

How odd.. i reviewed this earlier and it did not go in so i navigated from the page and came later. The first review was not here.. so i reviewed twice! lol

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

"The cold air sends shivers down her spine. She shall freeze tonight".. that is a strong beginning. She feels an alien, sometimes we unconsciously alienate ourselves without meaning to. I have.
"broken every rule in her book, ruin(ed) every ambition she's ever had".. we all have.
We have also made a mess of love.. this is a good poem.
(if you are the girl in the picture those who say, 'she's beautiful' are not lying because i think she is also)

Chloe

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

You were feeling this you say. You wrote your feelings down well.
When we are young we don't see what others might see in us.
Sometimes we alienate ourselves without meaning to.
I am assuming it is you in the picture and i see you are very pretty.
I am sorry if i sound as if i am 'preaching' to you.
I know it can be hard. I have been there and felt like an alien but it got better for me as i became older.
I like your writing and hope you continue to write all your feelings ..

Chloe